|Reviews for when the sky burns|
| I'M FIRIN' MAH LAHZOR chapter 1 . 12/14/2011
erm... is this suposed to be fantasy or sci-fi warhammer? the crosbow confused me
| Kelthemos of Nismon chapter 1 . 1/2/2011
Blocky block of block text is blocky.
| IronSpockMaster chapter 1 . 9/2/2010
Interesting beginning. i'm wondering where you'll take this. surprise me!:)
you do need to use more puunctuation, because it is very difficult to read, and more paragraph breaks. the change between peace and the fight took me by surprise, i hadn't even registered he was in a fight until well in because it was the same paragraph and it really confused me.
| Anonymous chapter 1 . 6/26/2010
Learn how to write the English language.