|Reviews for The Reaching|
| Amber Pegasus chapter 9 . 1/17/2011
This is exciting!
| Amber Pegasus chapter 8 . 11/28/2010
| Amber Pegasus chapter 7 . 11/23/2010
I have a bad feeling about this!
| Black4Ink chapter 7 . 11/23/2010
OMG you have to update soon. This fic is so
Interesting I live it ask much! What happens to Piper?
Is she like a tiger bcuz she can sure climb and jump and land like one
| Amber Pegasus chapter 6 . 10/4/2010
It's so hard to figure it out!
| Amber Pegasus chapter 5 . 9/11/2010
This chapter left me guessing!
| Amber Pegasus chapter 4 . 8/1/2010
I've got a bad feeling about this!
| Amber Pegasus chapter 3 . 6/29/2010
The life of Dark Ace a.k.a. Thorne.
| Amber Pegasus chapter 2 . 6/28/2010
Pretty good chapter!
| Amber Pegasus chapter 1 . 6/27/2010
I think it's okay
| lynne1923 chapter 2 . 6/26/2010
it was good but all the "just liker Her" stuff is confuseing
| Random-StoryKeeper chapter 2 . 6/25/2010
I must say, this fic is quite interesting. I'm sure it's a nice story and everything, but it could improve a lot more than it actually is, such as the removal of unnecessary words and such.
For example, adding "flashback" when there are flashbacks is unnecessary. It should only be italicized, and readers will already know you are in flashback mode.
There are also so many characters I can't quite comprehend in your story. They should be described more as to who they are, just so we readers can understand this story a bit better.
Overall, the story seems very rushed. Not much description as to where everyone is, what in the world is going on or why the characters portray these certain actions. Pace your action more carefully, use more punctuation and check your spelling and grammar. All these actions you do will better improve your story so that I can actually enjoy what is going on in your work.