|Reviews for Dance with the Devil|
| ElizabethBathog chapter 17 . 9/15/2012
This story was awesome! Good work! :D
| CardGamessOnMotercycles chapter 1 . 9/10/2012
I am more tales of the abyss myself, but this is my favorite Tales fanfic I hav read :D I Also loved the ending :) xxx love it XD
| A Tale Of Brothers chapter 17 . 7/6/2012
BEST PLOT EVER!
Have you ever considered becoming a writer? Your writing skills are really impressive...plus, that story made me cry and laugh and cringe and many other things throughout the chapters...I LOVE IT!
The ending is surprisingly satisfying, even though I'd really like to know how Flynn (and Yuri) are going to change that dreadful future )
Great, GREAT Job!
| fishy chapter 17 . 1/26/2012
Hnnnnng it's been awhile since I actually checked out this story and I just finished it so here's some thoughts.
I tend to like your descriptions, imagery and the introspection you put into the narrative. I think your writing has a lot of potential and I think you should really take a bit more time proofreading because there have been a lot of times where you tend to use the wrong word ("defiantly" in place of "definately", for example).
I really thought your plot had a lot of potential as well, but I guess I was disappointed with the ending simply because the, "It was all a dream!" trope seems like a really big cop-out. It's good that you don't completely breeze over the effect the dream might have, but at the same time it seems a bit much to have Flynn be so emotional over it?
Also, just something I didn't really get was why Yuri was sentenced to die... Like, I know that Alexei is saying it's a pre-emptive measure, but really, there has to be a larger motive than that. There's little to no political gain to be received from executing Yuri because in the end, a lot of his crimes are really petty. I was also really unsure of the timeline; it seemed like it was after Ghasfarost or something? But that also calls into question that did you AU out Pharaoh's appearance or what?
tl;dr I think your writing and plots have a lot of potential but your execution wasn't too believeable due to plot holes/lack of explanation or context.
I hope you'll take this review into consideration for future projects!
| blackblooddoomwolf chapter 17 . 12/21/2011
Wow i am impressed you write like a profashonal i loved your plot and i love how you stayed true 2 character that was truly amazing
| Rei-Yunacat chapter 17 . 12/7/2011
I was going to review ch15, then ch16 suddenly appeared! Well, I'm glad you finally included Repede, even though it was a bit sad... ;o; (noooo puppy!)
I'm still unsure if this was a dream or something more...uh...magical? Flynn seems to be taking it as a premonition, which, I guess is nice. Still doesn't tell me what that evil-floaty-rock-thing-of-doom was, or if it even ever existed in the first place. (Maybe, considering how much of a dork Flynn is (lol headdoorknob) he accidentally hit his head and thought he saw an evil-floaty-rock-thing-of-doom. AHHH Why am I speculating! ITS OVER! DDDDD;
And in a way I'm happy it's over, but sad. I'm happy because YOU TOOK SO FREAKING LONG I THOUGHT YOU MIGHT HAVE DIED and cuz YAY I CAN READ THE ENDING NOW!1! But I'm sad cuz...well...it's over... :/ It was a fun, dark emotional-filled ride that makes you think a bit of the "what-ifs" (and boy do I love what-ifs, I mean, the ONLY fanfic I have published is a dark "what-if" ) I'm glad it's all good in the end, and I liked how you illustrated how "broken" Flynn was even after returning home (you know, his GOAL all along?), though I'll admit the dancing seemed a little over the top, and lol the accidentally-made-the-fangirls-squeal-"TAKE THAT SHIRT OFF" moment!
I will admit, I feel the ending is lacking a little. Maybe because of some of the unanswered questions. There's also the fact that Sodia explained what happened, and we didn't get to hear her explanation! But I also like that fact because it makes you use your own imagination to guess what really happened without revealing it!
Ok, You are a genius *bows* and I hope you are doing well considering you disappeared for so long. (I checked back on the site sometimes thinking I missed an email update...)
I'll just take those thank you's, and this ending, as an early Christmas present!~ x3
| Kazane Hime chapter 17 . 12/6/2011
Once again; Amazing! You potrayed the characters almost perfectly :3
| Kazane Hime chapter 16 . 12/6/2011
Amazing Amazing Amazing! My own stories can't even compare! Can't wait for the next chapter!
| Rei-Yunacat chapter 15 . 5/30/2011
I'm a few days late of noticing this was updated because it got pushed back in my email plus I was extremely busy with things. ;o; (work and house remodeling)
I think it was a good idea to expand on Flynn's side. It gives everyone a better idea of what happened back then vs what Yuri thinks happened.
Can't wait to see how it all ends! I can only guess, and I have many guesses! O:
By the way, your updates always make me feel better! Not because the story is dark (obviously that would be really backwards) but because I get to continue reading the story, and thus I have something to look forward to! :3
(During this review a Breaking Benjamin song started playing on my phone/mp3 player, irony? xD)
Also, Cumore QQmore lol
| Azure-Wulfe chapter 15 . 5/27/2011
Pfff... even after all of that the council still called in favour of execution? Fail, council. Total fail. .
And damn that Cumore! Damn him! (Alexei too, ofcourse:3)
| Toolazytosignin chapter 15 . 5/26/2011
WOW this is BAD! Not the chapter, the chapters cool, but the fact that Yuri thinks Flynn doesnt care about him is a simple...ok, HUGE misunderstanding is just EVIL! Love it, and feeling newfound hatred toward Cumore...which is hard to find.
| TwiLightAmano chapter 14 . 5/5/2011
you say this short? then what about my story? _
so that's what's happen behind Yuri's back.. poor Flynn.. he has no choice but to vote..
damn Alexei for living! DX I hope he get killed very soon (go get him Yuri!)..
you should write 'surely' not 'surly' by the way..
wow, I'd like to read your poem.. :D
anyway please update! I'll be waiting~
| Azure-Wulfe chapter 14 . 5/2/2011
Why did not alert me to this update? ;-;
..Evil Alexei is Evil . Such a difficult choice poor Flynnie was forced to make. Still, i think he should have given Yuri a heads up beforehand though...
Once again, i applaud your ability to captivate the readers and keep us in suspense :D
| Rei-Yunacat chapter 14 . 4/24/2011
I didn't think it was short. Maybe you think so because other chapters are usually a little longer. Oh well.
In terms of repeated mistakes, you keep writing "surly" when it's "surely" (don't drop the e). I didn't really see a whole lot of mistakes, and definitely nothing that would damage the text.
I wonder who made you think to expand? Was it me? Now I'm curious about that! D:
Also, AAAHHHHH cliffhanger to part 2! -This update helped make my day so much better. Noticed it was posted after I got out of working ALL day on EASTER...
| LeoOsaka Bakura's stalker chapter 13 . 4/11/2011
Holy crap, I'd missed a few chapters and I'm kinda glad I did. Because I'd have gone crazy at the cliff hangers most of them I missed had. Now I wanna know what happens next after this. I'm still very curious, and that's a good thing! I do love the twisted way you pretty much eff'd over Yuri's life in this. Seems cruel, but it makes for the most efficiently anticipating story. I really feel for poor Flynn now though. He'd been there so long I'm sure realities would seem blurred when he makes it back. Can't wait for the next chapter! Thanks for the excellent read!