Reviews for Broken Hearts Can Only Heal
jullee chapter 1 . 4/26/2013
you described her heartbreak very well
yellow 14 chapter 1 . 7/3/2011
Touching. Keep writing
kingslayers chapter 1 . 5/10/2011

As in, Cassie RoseWeasleyElsieJamesEtc?

Whatever. It doesn't really change my review :)

This was so good! RoseScorp is my OTP, and I'm so glad that other NextGen writers still like it - DomScorp and LilScorp are taking over.

Le gasp.

This was worded beautifully, and I really felt for Rose, and I loved how you wrote Scorpius. Somehow, that little snapshot of a small span of time seemed to sum up years of knowing each other.

It was lovely.

Jane x
it would be reyna chapter 1 . 4/12/2011
Aww, that was really nice. :) and the way you ended it? Superb. The only bit of constructive criticism i can give is probably that for a little drabble or one-shot, it was a bit too long? But I actually love the length it's just right for me... But I just thought that maybe some people would find it too long... Well, that is all! Keep on writing! :D
Joelle8 chapter 1 . 9/22/2010
Love it. :)
squeakyswings chapter 1 . 8/30/2010
OH my goodness, you have such an incredibly gorgeous writing style. This entire piece just /breathed/ poetry, but not in a super over-done way at all and it worked so very well with the tension between Rose and Scorpius.

This line: "It hit him like one of the bolts of lightning still bursting and splitting through the swirling gloom that currently passed for the sky..." made me stop reading for a moment and just bask in the utter loveliness of this fic.

Your characterizations of Rose and Scorpius, and the way that you portrayed their relationship throughout the fic were also wonderful, and having this whole story from Scorpius's point of view worked incredibly well.

Just...plain lovely-gorgeous-fantastically well-written. And I'm sorry if this review makes no sense, my brain's stopped working.

But yeah, I loved it.


Kelsbury chapter 1 . 7/10/2010
..Wow. I'm glad I found this story, by the end of it I was just staring at my screen - the impact of this was amazing.

I love how decriptive you are, and I can picture them perfectly. I enjoyed this one shot, you're an amazing writer :)


Danielle chapter 1 . 7/7/2010
Cute sweet even with pretty much no speaking
xxx-angelin-xxx chapter 1 . 7/5/2010
First of all, you can definitely submit this for another challenge;)

Second it was lovely, I enjoyed reading a lot.

Third your scoring;)

1) Title: Interesting. And kind of intellectual;)


2) Prompt: I can see how and where you used it. But I expected the whole fic to be a little more angsty.


3) Overall fic: I like the plot, but there are some confusing points. (Like where she says 'i get what I deserve'. I really thought there was some history between them whenshe's said that. But you wrote a very interesting fic out of a very difficult prompt and you deserve props for that.


4) Grammar/Punctuation: Perfect!


Total: 16/20

(Please visit the thread on HPFC by the 17th of July for the results. Good luck!:D)
iMissHP chapter 1 . 7/4/2010
title:5/5 I like it and I think it fits very well.

Prompt: 4/5 I don't really understand how you used the song; Sure I see when and what you used, but there is something missing. (it's only /my/ opinion)

overall: 4,5/5 the fic is wonderful. With only one moment in their relationship, you made us understand the dynamics between them. My only little reproach (I'm giving you one only as a judge, not as a reader) is that your fic is a little blur in places.

grammar/punctuation: 5/5 I love the writing style! It's beautifully written. And flows incredibly well. Great job!

It's a beautiful fic, I truly love it. Great job!

Aphrael-08 chapter 1 . 6/30/2010
Interesting take. I like it. I wonder which of her Uncles, but the way you wrote it makes it so that it distinctly doesn't matter. It's a nice piece.
ksquires chapter 1 . 6/27/2010
I enjoyed your story! I found it very well written.

But there's one thing that bugs me...

Which Uncle? Lol...I mean Rose has like 5... :)
Twisted Identity chapter 1 . 6/26/2010
This was an awesome story. I like how her heartbreak wasn't about a boy but her uncle. It shows those aren't the only things one can be sad about.
SarahJH chapter 1 . 6/26/2010
I really love this :)

I think you could probably make it longer and develop it into a full blown story if you wanted... but the impact of it as a one shot is great.

I don't normally like reading stories with loads of dialogue so yours was exactly my cup of tea :)

I love how you've described the characters and I think you're a really talented writer...

I look forward to reading more of your stuff :) x
FollowThisRhythm chapter 1 . 6/26/2010
Okay- /now/ I can gush ;)

THIS IS AMAZING! The /whole way through/ I was staring at the screen awed and shocked and stunned and my heart was pounding and my breath- if it was physically possible, I would say I /hadn't/ been breathing, because WOW! Cassie, this was just- /mind-blowing/.

Firstly: The title and the way it was incorporated in the end: oh, it was /brilliant/. So lovely and so true and it was kind of heart-breaking in a way I can't even understand myself or describe but, gosh, it was simply /gorgeous/!

Secondly: Rose freaking Weasley- OHMYGOSH! I can't even begin to explain how /brilliant/ she was! She was so bright and she was so passionate and /alive/ and believable and she firefirefire and agony and heartbreak and she SHONE and she was ROSE WEASLEY! She is /exactly/ anything and everything I've ever imagined her to be- she wasn't a cardboard-cut out and she wasn't a shadow of her parents but, yet, there are some things about her that make it obvious that she is Hermione's and Ron's. You know what I mean? And it's amazing because almost /no one/ can get that in their fics while you have written her as if you were writing your own name! It's . . gosh, it's /genius/!

Thirdly: SCORPIUS HYPERION MALFOY. OhScorpius. He was, again, just like Rose: everything I ever wanted and everything I ever imagined and everything (in my opinion) he was ever meant to be. Again, there are those hints of Draco in him, these shades and these lines, that just make it so clear and so obvious that /of course/ he is Draco's son! Yet, these things aren't /bad/ and they don't shine a poor light on him- they make him /him/ and those pieces added with the original ones you gave him (along with those gorgeous brownbrown eyes;) just make him /Scorpius/ and he is PERFECT. Perfect, flawless, wonderful, kind of sullen, and veryvery handsome in his character ;) If I were a girl who swooned then I would have without-a-doubt already collapsed HAHA

Fourthly: The emotion. Oh, gosh, this piece was so unbearably-beautifully emotive I almost can't even believe it. You described everything in a way that made it /so easy/ to relate to and so easy to understand- it was if Scorpius' love and his confusion and that trail of defiance shown in the beginning, as well as Rose's agony and anger and sadness and hurt, were all running through me and my veins and they were just SO REAL. So alive, so vivid, I could /feel/ what they were and it was just incredible. Not many authors can project such a tangible world through words and the fact alone that you can is just- staggering and awesome and absolutely fantastic in itself.

Fifthly: Your words. They. Are. BEAUTIFUL. I absolutely loved and adored all of your descriptions of the thunder and the storm and of Rose. I love how you connected all of that together because it really gave a new face and a new insight into what she was honestly feeling and, oh, everything was just so realistic and believable! I know I sound like a broken record but I can't help it! It was as if I was seeing everything- every word and every line meshed together in this unbelievably perfect way to create the most lovely and agonized and kind of dark, kind of light picture in my mind. The experience was amazing and moving and it felt like so much more than only reading words off of a screen.

Sixthly. Your style. GORGEOUS and STUNNING and it's sharp and it's elegant and it's powerful and it's intelligent and it's lovelylovelylovely and I /adore/ it. You seem to know exactly what to put where and what you would like said and how to get to the place that you want and everything just works so impeccably well together. You write your words as if the one from one to another is just supposed to /be/ (if I'm making sense?), as if the words were created to exist there beside the ones at it's side. It's . . enchanting and spell-binding and so masterful and radiant.

Seventhly: The originality of this piece- I was expecting for her anger and anguish to be directed towards him, born because of him, or because of /them/ but I was not expecting it to be because of her uncle (which absolutely /broke my heart/ by the way. And I'm glad you didn't name him, I have to say, or I probably would have cried) and I loved that. I love that the story is not focused on them /completely/ even though it really is in most aspects- and I'm afraid I'm not explaining this well /at all/ but you've kind of fried my brain. Oh, and how they didn't end with the cliche kiss? S. Don't get me wrong- I wouldn't have complained, haha, /but/ at the same time your ending and his kiss to the top of her head and their hands entwining said SO MUCH. It spoke volumes for him and for her and for them as individuals and as a couple. Everything that needed to be said was and it was, again, simply and utterly beautiful.

Eigthly (yes, I know that these are no longer real words ;) HAHA): This line- "It had nothing to do with their surnames, or even their families; it was their innate desire to prove themselves worthy in their own right, to be the best, to win" -BRILLIANT. This line, of many, really struck me 'cause you brought a whole new idea to the table. I admit, I am one of the writers who usually made their surnames and families part of the problem but I LOVELOVE how you totally cut that off in here. I love how those weren't even factors and how everything between them was just because of /them/, just because she was Rose and he was Scorpius and they wanted to be the best they could be. I don't remember ever seeing anyone else do that before either so, seriously, brilliant (and I use that word so often because it is so fitting) job!

Ninthly. Your last line: perfection. Pure and simple. Your last line is what last lines in every fic aspire to be ;)

So, yes, I think I am done rambling and making a fool out of myself. I've run out of things to say (no doubt the moment I send this more will pop up in my head and I'll curse to myself wondering /whhhyyy/ I didn't write it in when I had the chance) and my wrist is beginning to cramp and I've already kept you waiting long enough so /here/! ;) I'm so happy I was able to help and I wish you /the best/ luck for the two contests- really, though, with this talent and these words? I think you're the last one who will need luck ;)


Your fic has begun to restore my faith in RS ;D

Amy xoxo
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