Reviews for Falling In Love
Jv Corpuz chapter 1 . 7/4
Its really amazing,but I wish you could wrote fan fictions long like a storybook...

That's it and pls write more of it...
LoveGlutton chapter 1 . 6/28/2014
No i lovw it
Dragon Lord Coker chapter 1 . 4/25/2013
Amazingly well written it comes off like you're truly inside her mind.
Dragonjek chapter 1 . 9/17/2012
Creepy and awesome! I love it! She makes other Yandere look perfectly sane!

Although... I think Tsukuyomi might be biting off more than she can chew
Sornek chapter 1 . 5/16/2012
awesome, completly and absolutely awesome! nothing more to say!
Angrysquid8 chapter 1 . 4/14/2011
You portrayed Tsukuyomi as the homicidal lunatic that she is.

This was undeniably disturbing and completely accurate.

It is indeed interesting to look at things from the perspective of a lunatic. It both intrigued and horrified me.
Dark Knight Gafgar chapter 1 . 1/13/2011
Anzer'ke chapter 1 . 11/6/2010
Well that was terrifying.

Brilliant...but terrifying.
fujin of shadows chapter 1 . 9/18/2010
Disturbingly creepy and good at the same time...COOL
Reps chapter 1 . 7/19/2010
Hahaha this is so disturbing it's awesome. Wouldn't mind seeing a few more chapters but still look's pretty good as a one shot
bissek chapter 1 . 7/17/2010
Something to think on: At TFF, the general consensus of Zazie(?)'s comment that Negi's path could easily cause bloodshed than Fate's should have resulted in Tsukuyomi breaking down the wall Kool-Aid Man style and defecting.
NightmareSyndrom chapter 1 . 7/12/2010
If you think its creepy that you what to write more of it, does that make me creepy for wanting to read more of it?
lilfriend400 chapter 1 . 7/2/2010
That must be a wonderful piece of creepiness of all the negima fics I've read ;] You really grasp the concept of how the manga was played out, and for a sec, I thought you were to going to ship Fate-han into this, but mmeh, a threesome is a threesome xP

Improvements? You can always dust off the minor errors, as you can achieve by rereading a couple times if you feel like it (-sighs- I, on the other hand... -laziness-). However, I am not as accustom to repetition as much as you are. Take this for example:

"But then…

But then…

But then…"

You can probably fit in some details and clarify the tone when she reads these words because in some cases, variations of interpretations can be a havoc if they're not similar. In other words:

But then...

I grasp the handle of my sword, grounding my teeth as I fell to the ground.

But then...

My eyes started watering, indicating that every single drip was of priority.

You see where I'm going? Though I'm too used to first person to really bring out the way you want to express it, but hey, an example is an example xP

Anyways, I look forward to your next piece, and God bless our writing skills~ ;33
ColinatorGX chapter 1 . 6/29/2010
Eeek! She's creepy. But yeah, she certainly gave off something like these feelings towards Negi in the latest chapter.

Thing is, the stronger and primal a person is, likely the more excited she gets about him/her.

Good job, I'd say
Scygnus Darkhawk chapter 1 . 6/28/2010
*slow clap*

You work fast. This is pretty much a perfect characterization of Tsukuyomi, and very well written besides. Hats off to you, sir.
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