|Reviews for Reunion|
| nami chapter 3 . 10/21/2016
So that dude was shady!
I can't believe he destroyed Surge so easily o_o
""Well, you were on a Pokemon journey, and I was trying to make Ash feel bad for Brock, and dead sounds a whole lot better than you just going out on a Pokemon journey."'
That made me laugh so much XDD
| Guest chapter 2 . 10/21/2016
What's wrong with that Nathanael dude? Lol
| nami chapter 1 . 10/21/2016
I can't believe he asked his mom if Misty was still scrawny lol is he obssessed with her body or what? LOL
And poor Misty!
| Gyotso chapter 4 . 2/12/2014
amazing story so far! wish i didn't need to sleep but im dead XD can't wait till after school tomoro cause I want to know whats next!
| mumblesnake chapter 17 . 12/8/2013
Love the story so far. I just got done reading the where hauter is defeated by tyranitar, you got something in it. Hauter got hit with a hyper beam but haunter is a ghost type and hyper beam is a normal attack and ghost types are supposed to be immune to normal attacks so when the hyper beam shouldn't had affected haunter. Just an fyi
| Brock'sBlind chapter 18 . 9/8/2013
THAT WAS BEAUTIFUL! but the surge and raichu part was effective and made me nearly cry
| Misty Blue chapter 5 . 12/31/2012
First off, I wholeheartedly agree with you; both on the Pokemon shipping name-coining with added referencing part, and the lemon part. Respect is right, hope others get the message as well.
And lastly, I think this piece is brilliant. I was grabbed by the very first chapter, and now I cannot stop.
| Darkfireking chapter 18 . 10/3/2011
(Hysterical crying) THIS WAS SO AWSOME! I JUST LOVED IT! although, you should of made ash turn butler into dog food for what he did, then damn his soul for the rest of eternity. he was just evil. 5 STARS!
| Steveaaml chapter 4 . 3/4/2011
Soo cool! I started reading this ages ago, got exceedingly busy with school and work, then never finished. So happy to be checking it out again! Loving it so far.
| SnowyWolborg chapter 2 . 12/4/2010
I kinda hope Misty doesn't turn out to be a one trick pony with Gyarados as her main powerhouse. I would like to see some other Water type Pokemon she didn't have in the series as part of her arsenal as well. If Gyarados is the reason she's so powerful, that would be very sad.
Same for Sabrina, I also hope she's evolved some of her Pokemon.
Good chapter overall.
| TotalPotato chapter 18 . 10/10/2010
I read the whole thing in a oner last night, so this comment will encompass the story as a whole.
Your beginning was fantastic. The way you portrayed the main characters (Ash, Misty and I guess Delia and Lola) was very good, and very true to their characters. And your OCs were strong as well, which is hard to pull off with characters with a personality already etched into a reader's mind. Nathanael in particular was interesting - I saw him as a guy with a controversial, yet somewhat logical idea, who slowly showed that he was extremely single-minded (and ruthless as a result) about his goals. Essentially, all of your characterisation impressed me.
I thought Sabrina was pretty overpowered, but I took that as artistic license, and it didn't bother me too much. What did bother me a little was the fact that she ordered people about without explanation, and they just went along with it.
The characterisation continued to impress me for quite a while (although I didn't really care about Shi and Ka for some reason). I loved how you managed to blend the unique quirks of each character into all the different situations they were in. In fact, it was only towards the last third of the story that my enjoyment waned.
It seemed like after you'd acknowledged Ash and Misty's feelings about one another to the audience, they became blander. It wasn't just them, either - all of the characters seemed to waver between three moulds of emotion: a determination to take their enemy down (this was the main one); hesitation as to whether killing was the right thing to do; love spurring them on to incredible acts. Sure, there were one or two twists such as Sabrina's blind panic, but you didn't really follow those twists through, and as a result, all of the characters felt kind of similar.
Not only that, but every major confrontation turned into a gory slugfest. It was horrifying the first time (when Nathanael stormed the Vermillion Gym), but each of these conflicts brought back a feeling of déja vu, causing the events to lose impact each time they occurred. By the last few chapters, limbs were flying everywhere, people and Pokémon were dying left and right, and it was just a bit... boring. There was nothing new there that hadn't been done in a previous chapter.
On a more personal note, I was hoping to see Nathanael developed as a radical kind of guy with huge plans and an incredible drive to follow them through, but with those plans have some sort of logical edge to them, even if they ended up hurting some feelings. I felt a little let down when I was basically told that this guy was evil. Maybe this is just me, though.
I honestly think that this story peaked too soon. You developed the characters, put them in some terrifying scenarios, drew out some romantic feelings, and then just had nowhere to go from there. Or maybe your writing just went on autopilot after a while. Or perhaps you wanted to tie up every loose end for every character in the Pokémon world, and so the story ended up running away from you. I know that this review sounds pretty negative, but I really hope you don't get too disheartened, because I honestly thought that the first 13 chapters were great. Great characterisation, great sense of mystery, great humour. Whatever you decide to do with my review, please keep writing!
| NeoMiniTails chapter 5 . 9/28/2010
Was that Mewtwo at the end of the chapter?
I really liked Ash/Misty's moment together... Although Ash and Pikachu, while I found them comical... They acted more like Shaggy and Scooby than the trainer/poke-friend trio...
I had a hard time getting into Surge's scene... Though I did like the quote about it being a war, not a competitive match...
On a scene with Cassidy, you were speaking of her hair and said "his" two tails of hair.
Good job. I'll read another chapter later.
| NeoMiniTails chapter 4 . 9/27/2010
Ah, another interesting chapter... About as good as the second chapter.
Ash and Misty's reunion was very realistic. I could imagine that happening...
My only problem with this chapter is that Nathanael, although I know he's sadistic and about as evil as can be, he just doesn't strike a fearsome cord with me... I don't know what it is...
Ah my sexy Lorelei! She's there in the flesh!
Anyhow, good job...
| NeoMiniTails chapter 3 . 9/27/2010
Much better than the second chapter. The epic fight scene at the end was amazing... And Sabrina was much better characterized in this chapter than the last.
Her scene with Misty and Molly was hilarious. I chuckled a few times, reading it.
I also loved this line: Tauros were fast; not smart... Technically, it's grammatically wrong but it's Ash's perspective so what do I care about grammar. Anyhow, it made me chuckle, imagining Ash thinking this while riding the Tauros...
Rhyperior is a rock/ground type right? I thought he'd be unaffected by thunder attacks...
Misty's reaction to Sabrina being there was funny and realistic, wondering if she had heard her thoughts and now was coming for her...
A very enjoyable chapter.
| NeoMiniTails chapter 2 . 9/27/2010
Ah finished with chapter two.
I thoroughly enjoyed the first two parts although I did find it odd that Ms. Ketchum would let him go back to that old school outfit to go see Misty after having given him two more trendy outfits after that...
I liked the suspense of not giving out whom Misty was battling before revealing it was Molly. One problem, during that section, when you meant to say Gyrados... You accidently called it Kingdra...
For the Sabrina scene, I don't know if I found it to be unnecessary or just not that interesting.
I saw that you tried to bring back the scary Sabrina that we all know and love but in my personal opinion, it didn't quite work.
Her thoughts were too human, too emotional... Although I could see you wanted to still make her fearsome but for me, it came off comical especially with the scene of the man begging that there could be a more sensible way to handle the situation.
I think this scene wouldve worked more if you projected through more of Nathanael's POV than through her's. And the scream at the end made the scene even more not useful...
However, I do see that you did use the information that at the end of the episode, Sabrina became more normal thanks to Ash making her laugh... However, she still seemed ooc to allow a man to make her become angry enough to yell...
Overall, 8.4/10 on this chapter.
So good job.