|Reviews for Journey to the center of my worth|
| Timon64 chapter 17 . 12/8/2010
Loved it! Absolutely Loved it!
Such a Great ending to a Great fic!
Enjoyed every part of this story from Chapter 1 so long ago to the end.
Thank you for taking us along on this awesome journey!
P.S. I'll be waiting for the epilogue...Juliene Rules!
| coolster chapter 17 . 12/6/2010
LOVED IT you're a great writer
| Decepticon Fan chapter 17 . 12/6/2010
Bravo! This is definitely the best Juliene on this site. Everyone was IC and I'm also glad Julien got a chance to finally mature. It's all perfectly written. :-)
| Joe 'Po' Navark chapter 17 . 12/5/2010
Well this was one hell of a read. I'm glad with chapter in particular you kept all the penguins in character. And if I may say that line about the Mac KILLS, Awesome. Even Julian himself had a great struggle in this chapter finally conquering his own mind and finally being able to come back to the zoo to be with his love.
The lion has been reunited with the lioness and all is right in the jungle.
| Timon64 chapter 16 . 12/4/2010
I've read your story so far up to this point and let me say its one of the best Juliene i've read so far)
Since i've always loved Juliene anyway it was obvious that i love this story.
One question though what is up with the Julien lookalike? That dude freaks me out!
Can't wait for your next up date)
| Decepticon Fan chapter 16 . 11/28/2010
This fanfic of yours is one the best on here. This would make a very good special movie if it were actually on TV. (Though the rating would have to go up) Please update soon.
About my chapter 11 review. My naive self didn't know what a lemon actually was. Now I know... (and won't be reading anymore of those anytime soon) lol
| Decepticon Fan chapter 11 . 11/28/2010
o_O That's all I have to pretty much say... Whoa...
| Spongehead chapter 16 . 11/27/2010
I love, love, LOVE this fic, and cannot wait to read the next chapter! :D Please update soon? Pretty please? :)
| Joe 'Po' Navark chapter 16 . 11/5/2010
The penguins have blood and Julian has blood on his hands! I always love resoursefulness in stories and those penguins definitely embody that.
Gosh that last part was riveting. One second your lover then the next... actually I don't know what it is yet. But I can't wait.
I'm sorry I'm not more help with suggestions. Especially since you're so much help to me. I might finally have that chapter up tomorrow morning, with any luck.
again, great chapter
| Joe 'Po' Navark chapter 15 . 10/19/2010
Great chapter! I new the penguins would be putting a plan into action. It's interesting to see how Julien is the central focus of the chapter without even saying a word. I thought the swarm of cats showing up was a humorous add in. but now what's going to happen to the three penguins vs the police, without even their leader? Can't wait!
| halfhuman123 chapter 14 . 9/30/2010
Alright! I'm glad you took your time on this chapter, it made it SOO much easier to read, and even that much better, great job!
Until the second third of the story.
The first part was written very well, with precision and detail and I liked it a lot, it really is great. But then, when you were talking about Skipper going to see Julien after he got his cast, you slipped back into old habits. Commas at the end of paragraphs, for example. Several of those could have been ellipses (...) or just periods. A comma is used to separate two clauses or to indicate a break or pause in a sentence, like for dramatic effect. Dr. should have been spelled out (sorry, but that one irked me, I think in another chapter you had Marlene say idk instead of I don't know...). And I'm thinking you meant tweezers instead of tongs, because if you meant tongs... well, that would be a VERY painful and different operation!
If you compare this one to your first chapter... it's a bit better, you can tell that progress has been made, but don't get lazy. (I'm not saying that you are...) The only way you get better is with practice and time, and while I admit the amount of work you put into this was OUTSTANDING, there are always improvements to be made.
| Joe 'Po' Navark chapter 14 . 9/28/2010
You know, it never occurred to me how serious Julien's condition could be. I didn't expect it to be this bad. I knew it was serious when Skipper called Julien his best friend. Glad MAurice was mentioned, it was probably a smart choice to have him not tell Mort. Now the penguins have a a plan as usual. Hope it works!
| Joe 'Po' Navark chapter 13 . 9/14/2010
I never expect to be amazed chapter after chapter but some how you do it. God, I thought I'd never get off the edge of my seat. That was pretty good on Julien's and Skipper's part. You could feel the heat of their situation (pun intended) as they fought to stay alive. I can't wait for the next chapter, but somehow I must.
| halfhuman123 chapter 1 . 9/11/2010
Hello again! So... I thought I'd read this one over once I saw it switched over to M for some strange reason... and I'm... indecisive about how I feel about it. On the one side, it's a great story! Interesting premise and chapter 11 was really great. But I'll get to that later. Yes, all in one comment, I'm feeling the lazies right now, I apologize. I have to say that the first chapter definitely draws the reader in. HOWEVER... and this is a big one... you're going off a script format straight into a story format. Which, is good, it shows that you're trying to change and expand and that's great, I'm one hundred percent sincere in that... but it doesn't translate over well if you don't edit it. For example, your quotes... when you have, say... Julien, "Insert dialogue here"... it distracts the reader from wanting to read more. I honestly did not want to read any more, but, like I said before, chapter 11 made me go back and grit my teeth and bear it. Honestly, though, I shouldn't have to. If you don't want to go back and edit the current chapters you have up, I completely understand that (because I totally feel the same about my suckrific first attempts at stories... seriously, they're about as awful as a story could get), but you might want to go through upcoming chapters and fix that.
As for chapter 11... I thought it was amazingly written and beautifully executed. Yours is one of the first stories I've read that gave the female top position her first time (Which is, as I've heard, advised for a first timer). Not ONLY that, but it was well done, too! It was long, which is a welcome bonus for lemons, as most of them are pretty short and far between. Everything happened smoothly and flowed... definitely had a rhythm to it and it worked! Congrats and good job on your first lemon, it was a great read. Other than that, the other chapters... I've yet to read through all of them, like I said those few things... you really REALLY should let your chapters sit for a while and then go back and read them so you can see any errors you have. Sure it makes updating a lot longer, but your fans will thank you and it will be much more worth it when you don't get irritating comments like mine (I know, I'm irritating, so shoot me.) asking you to fix it. Over all, great story, and I CAN wait to read more (hint hint) :)
| Joe 'Po' Navark chapter 12 . 9/5/2010
Haha, suspense indeed. That was a nice build up of nonsense on Julien's part. Hope skipper and them can make it out. Explosions, fires, and mayhem Oh my! I'll definitely stay tuned.