|Reviews for Takamachi Nanoha of 2814|
| DragonSword35d chapter 28 . 5/11/2013
So, this mean you WILL go into StrikerS? Cause, with Nanoha not a member of the TSAB, that changes a lot of things. Should be good to see how you handle things. Well, that, or just the years in between.
| alethiophile chapter 28 . 5/11/2013
This thing is great. Wonderful to see an update finally.
| shanejayell chapter 28 . 5/11/2013
Great update. :D
| Dogbreathsan chapter 13 . 5/10/2013
"She tugged him away and patted him on the hand. "Hush, Ranma-kun. It's just Hayate-chan's crazy relatives. Pretend their not their." They hurried away." You had two chances to get the they're/there/their forms correct - you blew them both. [Pretend they're not there is how you should have done it. Yes, I'm niggling. Sheesh.]
You weren't kidding about the purple prose. You should bottle some of that for the Bulwer-Lytton Fiction Contest. /. Damn funny either way. Way to go.
Most of all, I'm in awe at how you have the time to both absorb all the material you parody and then actually parody the material. You have a great grasp there of the people and their motivations and the personalities they're exhibiting. And yes, I'm digging at you a bit; the usage of all three is correct in that sentence.
Niggling aside I'm enjoying the read. Thank you and please continue the good work, for the work is indeed quite good.
| Pr Kaos chapter 27 . 5/6/2013
Was browsing the discussions about next chapter's latest extract (Nanoha and Rein) on the TvTropes board and noticed something : unless I'm mistaken, Nanoha HAS already met Archer after the Homuraba Gakuen incident (phallic worm-Invader thing, see F/HGWof2814). Thus you might want to reconsider this little part of her speech (or have someone point it out to her and pass it as a memory slip, works too I guess).
Would have posted on the TT board, but way too lazy to register.
Keep up the good work, anyway. That's quite the interesting fic you have there, got me interested in Nanoha, the Nasuverse and Jim Butcher (only knew Negima, CCS and a little GL when I stumbled upon this :p ), which I think was for the greater good (mine, at least). Also acts as a very good stress reliever, believe it or not.
And hopefully the URAE crossover will be over soon, so you can go back to your own writings. *blinks as the universe lets out a howl of laughter* *shrugs* Hey, one can hope... Not that I don't like URAE, mind you.
| Story Weaver1 chapter 14 . 5/2/2013
Negi would never stoop to revenge! Unless it has an educational purpose because he has to do his job. No bitter feelings, right? Seducing them and simultaneously gulit-tripping them while they sit without panties qualifies as Cool and Unusual Punishment. Cassandra's Only Sane Man commentary makes the scene even better.
Congratulations. You have made a ten year old putting on a suit sound like Tony Stark putting on Powered Armor.
I enjoyed the lesyay in this chapter; it was funny. Setsuna's "displacement activity" was the first Freudian joke that I liked. She and Fate should become friends because their dreams are similar. _
| Grissom chapter 4 . 5/2/2013
...words fail me.
This is a magnificent chapter. Absolutely fantastic stuff.
If anyone asks, THIS is how you depict an alien invasion of Earth, dammit! :D
And Nanoha hugging Superman like that at the end... d'awww! So sweet! :)
| Grissom chapter 3 . 5/2/2013
Ring-chan's character development is coming along nicely (even if she/he/whatever isn't getting new powers in the process ;D) - the reaction to the barrier jacket is especially enjoyable.
"Deputy?" Tomoyo asked. A cute little furry thing crawled up to Green Lantern-chan's shoulder. It was , for some reason, wearing a domino mask and a green and black sock-like outfit. "Oh, he's so cute!"
"Thank you," it said.
There was a beat.
...that's just classic. Absolutely classic. :D
Keroberos and Yuuno's interaction is a true joy to behold; here's hoping they form a club for cute animal sidekicks later on...
...the Giant Turtle Incident is perfect. The anti-climactic end to the rampage, the Anonymous Passerby asking "That's it?" ...great stuff.
The meeting with the Sailor Senshi made me almost fall out of my chair, I was laughing so hard. :)
The meeting with Konoemon Konoe... fantastic. And here's hoping Nanoha forms a Pactio with Negi one day! I mean, she's got a GL power ring and Raging Heart; surely a Pactio card would make a rather nice addition to her arsenal?
Superman's advice on how to deal with magic is sound stuff, has the air of 'learned this the hard way' about it. And buying Nanoha ice cream after? Very nice. :)
...Ferret Lantern? Hilarious, and it works, too! :D
You missed two archaeologists who could've/should've sneezed - Lady Lara Croft, and Doctor Daniel Jackson. (From the 'Tomb Raider' and 'Stargate' franchises respectively.) Nice list that did make it, though.
The tabloid article about Superman's 'date' and Luthor's reaction to it... great stuff. :)
Nice omake, too. Here's hoping Chao runs into Booster Gold at some point! :)
| Dogbreathsan chapter 6 . 4/26/2013
Hmmm... sorry, no cure for hyperellipsosis. Yer screwed. Take it like a man (or a woman... your gender seems male but I have no confirmation of that. Sorry.)
| Dogbreathsan chapter 4 . 4/25/2013
Dude! Nicely done, and much appreciated.
The last two paragraphs/sentences made my eyes cloud up. Must be allergy season...
I'm in awe at your ability to mix and mash all the disparate memes. Congratulations.
And thank you.
| Dogbreathsan chapter 2 . 4/24/2013
OK, pretty damn good. I AM amused - and that is a good thing. I'm getting used to your jumping around, it is actually an effective device for driving the story forward.
OMFG - at least 35 more chapters to go...
| Story Weaver1 chapter 12 . 4/21/2013
This chapter was mostly silly but that ending was so serious. 'shit got real' level serious.
Some of the shoutouts are funny and some are lame but I'm glad one of them was a plot point this time. If Vita has enough free time to explore Tv Tropes than she must have arrived on Earth long ago; makes sense.
Hurray for Foe-Yay. That omake was the most fun about this update.
| omnimon12 chapter 14 . 4/10/2013
Damn, you made Negi take 150 Levels in Badass
| Grissom chapter 2 . 4/8/2013
Cute little ferrets...
The customised uniform...
"Oh, poot! Not this again..."
"Superman-sama, isn't it awkward having that plane on your back?" / "A little, yes."...
"By the Power of the Ring…"
"I'm sure I can fix that…"
The banned ring constructs list...
The Magical Girl Corps of Sector 2814...
These are without a doubt magnificent highlights of this chapter. Great stuff all 'round, that lot. :)
| Grissom chapter 1 . 4/8/2013
Nanoha with a power ring - sheer genius! :)
I've only just found this series - hell, I've only read this chapter so far, and yet I'm already hooked. Looking forward to reading C2, and here's hoping my forthcoming reviews help you to get back in the saddle with this series.