Reviews for Secrets Untold
Melissa the kawaii yandere chapter 4 . 8/20/2015
Ugh, just no.
I just can't enjoy this!
And no-no it's not because it's incest(I have no problem with incest at all!), but the way you portrayed Louis sjust doesn't seem right :/
He seems a bit manipulative and possessive, y'know?
It's as if he's using Al and that's something that I can't accept! XD
Mewlexii chapter 4 . 2/26/2014
I say ditch Louie and go with scorpius! This is really well written and i hope you will continue it...with albus finally ditching louie first and getting together with scorpius in the future cause louie is obviously cheating and taking advantage of him :/ sorry i love this story and im taking out my annoyance with louie on you
Petrichor-3 chapter 4 . 9/3/2012
As a new reader, I am currently looking forward to more of this :) so please don't forget about it!
maddi chapter 4 . 1/18/2012
is louis supposed to come off as manipulative, dominating, possessive and just... evil?

'cause if so, you nailed it.

i think the nicest way to interpret your louis is that he loves al very much and is very confused and a bit unstable.

you could call me narrow-minded, but you would be wrong. i'm all for the whole "all love is pure" philosophy. the incest isn't the most unsettling thing about this. it's the fact that al is 12 and heartbreakingly confused about the whole situation. as a result, louis inevitably seems perverted, like he's taking advantage of al's naivety. because of all this, i found it difficult to get any sort of a romantic feel from the story.

interesting depiction of next generation relationships, though. i think louis is often overlooked. everyone assumes rose and hugo would be albus' favourites. but the son of bill and fleur weasely, with veela blood- he's just inspiring, isn't he?
blackending chapter 4 . 12/6/2011
Oooo~ I hope Louis be honest to the you'll update.:)
Sayu-Sayu chapter 4 . 9/25/2011
story is so good!

i love it.

please continue!

louis x al is the favorite of me.
1683200 chapter 4 . 8/3/2011
Ultimatums are the best. Thanks for a great chapter. Loved it as always.
airachiine chapter 1 . 6/15/2011
u are awesome! :) i love it
x.Lemon.Tea.x chapter 3 . 1/16/2011
Oh Louis. I just want to throw a huge fishstick on his face. Al deserves so much better. Louis shouldn't be allowed to double dip, if he wants Al to belong to him, he should also be exclusively Al's.

And how the hell is this 'Completed?' Are you going to leave it like this or will you update it? I would LOVE to read more. :)
LttleSparrow chapter 3 . 12/22/2010
WHAT! Where is the rest? Rada it can't end there. Nonononononoooo... It was a really cute story bar the ending.

I don't know if you turned Louis into a cheating bastard or someone trying to cover up a secrete. Poor Al is to cute to be cheated on... Lauren Jane you are a meany! I liked your story but it asked more questions then answered and now I am going to be spending the day figuring things out. lol, Thanks for the story love.
Lennia chapter 2 . 12/8/2010
Hi there!~ I pretty much liked your story so far and even if you haven't updated since August I still have the faint hope you'll continue it sometime soon!


I think you did a really good job and it's amazing how you managed to display Al's insecurity and confusion (fitting to his age) so so well!

The only thing is, I do think you went a little little bit too fast. A few more insinuations and hints before any kisses or sexual actions would have been nice. On the other hand I can accept this as teenager!Louis having reached it's limit! Maybe you could cut down the sappy talking a bit. Of course we all want them to say "I love you" "I can't be/live without you" etc - but I think it's a bit too fast plus then it's all good stuff in one go. You should let them in bit by bit, as if they'd be something really tasty to eat which we can only enjoy time after time.

Anyway, keep going, please! *A*

And yesh, Flayu made us all love this pairing, didn't she? She also made me a sucker for FenrirxHP, TRxHP, Horcrux x HP and many more! Oh dear :D
Monday Mourning in the Asylum chapter 2 . 12/5/2010
You make me question my moral stance on incest... in a good way.

This is really really good.
Cloud chapter 2 . 11/25/2010
Your story is brilliant! I wouldn't worry about the little reviews since Louis is not at all known by most.
Kate chapter 2 . 11/23/2010
Oh, I really enjoyed this story. Would you write more? Please~?
Ms.jazzylady chapter 2 . 8/31/2010
OMG! I love this combination so much it should seriously be illegal. This whole story is just so wrong, but just feels so right! Haha, anywho. I think that its amazing how you fit soo much details into one chapter, and the flow of the story. All I would say is put more spacing amongst your paragraphs. It just difficult for the reader to keep there place and causes a headache. But awesome story, and please update!
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