Reviews for A Mirror Never Lies
KND Universe chapter 2 . 8/25/2015
Perfect
KND Universe chapter 1 . 8/23/2015
Perfect
Reviewer chapter 3 . 12/28/2014
I have a pretty high tolerance for messed up shit, especially when it means reading about a pairing I like, but this was just shit. Seriously, how do you expect me to get turned on when you're talking about women getting their genitals chewed up? That's just gross. Imagine trying to get turned on while watching porn, and suddenly the woman starts shoving hot needles into the guys scrotum. Seriously, it's not a nice mental image.
Also, making Pyramid head James was a huge cop out. I wanted to read about a hot monster, not James with a mask on.
This story could easily be fixed with a beta reader, less genital torture, and Pyramid head being a monster.
Guest chapter 4 . 10/25/2014
sad but sweet
Venusgirl 2290 chapter 4 . 4/8/2014
please can you do a sequel to this story. I feel that Heather can be back with pyramid head aka james. T_T
Kayla chapter 4 . 1/13/2014
I think you did an amazing job. What a turn on...I did notice some spelling mistakes but nothing is perfect. I think the story made perfect sense and was very detailed and realistic. Ignore the haters if they don't like it they should not read. Great job once again.
EvilFuzzle100 chapter 1 . 1/8/2014
This is an amazing story and beginning chapter :) ! It made Pyramid Head even sexier then he already is lol. Also, when I started to read the lemon scene, I had to look away for a moment in awkwardness and laugh, because ironically my name's Heather lol. It made the story all the more interesting haha
Nyckole Heart chapter 4 . 11/2/2013
Damn you for getting me attached to this story just to leave me hanging. I wanted pyramid hend to have a family with her or something. Damn it all to Hell I love this story.
JustCharlieBruh chapter 4 . 10/15/2013
Sequel? Please, sequel?
Nogitsunelovesstiles chapter 2 . 7/9/2013
that was hot...
Nogitsunelovesstiles chapter 1 . 7/9/2013
good god thats hot
BotanJaganshi chapter 4 . 6/28/2013
aw :'( the end was so sad but awesome story
Sorry chapter 2 . 1/20/2013
The ideas centering the core of the story are good. For example, I found the ending of the first chapter to be funny. Waking up and thinking what happened was a weird wet dream only to find out it really happened? Gold.

However, there are a few issues that need to be worked out. Firstly, the spelling and grammar were very poorly maintained throughout the entirety of this story. That is a huge issue. It was so bad that reading through the third chapter (I read the first two) would have been subjecting myself torture. This brings us to our second point; torture. This story needs more emotional development. You mentioned that Heather was upset with herself briefly and the story certainly has its moments here and there. Now you just have to focuse on building on emotion in your future writings. Remember that Heather Is a teenage girl. She is being raped by a complete stranger in a place comparable to hell. Plus she is being hurt physically.

All in all, this story has potential. You are one of the few people who tried to add to a popular, yet small, section of fanfiction and I respect you for that. That's why it's sad that your stories are suffering (heavily, might I add) from a severe lack of proof reading.

P.S. I am not writing this to flame you or to make you feel bad. I just genuinely think that there are some things that you could improve in your future stories. I am sorry that I couldn't enjoy the story due to the spelling and gramerical errors. I understand if this comment upsets you in anyway. If I were in your shoes I'd be crestfallen to receive mail like this. However, I thought it needed to be said since the story has potential. If you want to contact me for whatever reason I have a fanfic account. It doesn't fit in the guest box, so I just figured that I'd write it down here. Kaila-TheMonianFoxGirl
IIREDPYRAMIDII chapter 4 . 1/15/2013
I remember reading this when I first begin reading Silent Hill fan fiction,and I must say,besides spelling,I am IN LOVE with your version of this pairing.I could personally care less what the haters think,because,if such a story in ingrained in me personally,even after six years,its a memorable one!It was so nostalgic rereading this, I knew it,I was overcome with the same tears I cried as I read the parts of her much power in goodbye.
Thank you for writing it.
carsatan chapter 4 . 11/22/2012
I love this story
I cried at the ending, I thought it was so sad
Good job!
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