"SON OF A-!"

It's morbidly funny to read about you screwing with the characters. I hope you find the time to do it with the other ones.

Psychodelic. Scary. Brilliant. Did you know playing with the concept of SI in God Mode in an exceptional manner. I hope you continue with this fanfiction. Thank you for sharing your story with us.

P.S.: Poor Maya

It's all like, a metaphor and stuff.

Good to know you're still writing bro.

Exotic. Strange. Odd. Weird. Bizarre. Really different, but I liked it. Thank you for your story.

Not bad, not bad at all.

Gotta say it's a very interesting concept.

Skill wise i don't see a problem with your writing style, grammar or spelling so your good there.

I will keep this review short, as i want to read more before i analyse it at a deeper level.

Looking forward to the next chapter.

Weird, original and bold. But even a parady of SI such as this may get old quickly if the SI has to much page time. Ah! no offence.

This one is a really great story.

You are playing with the concept reality here and you do it in an entertaining way.

Breaking the fourth wall (as it is called in comics) can be a very nice piece of work or it can be crap.

You managed the former.

As a fanfiction Author I've dabbled at this myself, but your style is better...

Thanks for the fun read.

Its like some deconstruction of fanfiction, and a parody of Evangelion. Or what happens when the Fourth Wall breaks. That kind of obessive detail at the start...that really is his life isn't it?

The blood scene became so ridiculous, it was almost funny. Almost because you wrote the absurdity in a way that was not at all funny, but sick.

10,000 characters to work with.

Nope. 9957 now.

damnit. This confounded number keeps going down the more I type.

The thing about time is that it's not steady. The mind fills in the blanks and gives the illusion that there is a moment, an instance in time, and we run with the concept by naming it 'the present'. That's somewhat illusionary. The perception of time is a perception of a steady process. But animation is different, and so is written fiction. If I want to, I could have stopped reading after the 2,311th character. If the crew at Gainax wanted to, they could have stopped animating the series after the 40,582nd frame.

You had some interesting things going on here, and the ridiculously blatant SI move gave you an avenue to explore them succinctly but impractically. There comes a point when this kind of approach to meta-fiction stops being storytelling and turns into some kind of self-indulgent essay *about* storytelling. It's a fine method for dumping information, but as storytelling goes, you usually want things like this operating on a thematic level more than the literal one. Not that I'm one to talk, I guess, but consider this advice from someone who has had more than a few failed experiments in the method before.

It's too bad you didn't continue, though. You had me going with Makoto's oh-so-relatable social semi-deficiency and hopeless crushing. Plus, I've always liked the bridge techs. Well, mostly Maya, and mostly because she's cute, but Aoba and Makoto were always cool enough. I think it's possible for you to have explored the themes you bring up in more subtle, creative ways in subsequent chapters, actually, especially if you were willing (I'm assuming) to play with internal logic and continuity. The very idea of SI fics is something that always supplies nearly endless amounts of things to play with for writers with knack for parody and a fearlessness of storytelling taboos. The act of analyzing that inevitably leads to getting into the act of writing fiction and the relationship that fiction has to its audience, something fanfiction complicates even more given that it is itself a response to that initial relationship. If you were to push the story in that direction, you'd have one gloriously convoluted knot of deconstructive gibberish, I'm sure, but it'd be fun to read. It looked like you were headed in that direction anyway.

7562 characters left. Huh.

Very interesting idea. I have never seen a si done like this. It will be interesting to see the characters reactions to some one thats basically god to them.

Makoto's death was impressive.. very surreal.

Especially after you let us look into his soul for some time.

The conversation with Gendo was also entertaining. I actually anticipated some sarcastic comment from you after Ritsuko's remark.

Imho, this idea is worth developing into a fairly big story.

Look forward to the next session.

PS Just dont hurt them.. too much, please.

Aw man, poor Makoto :'(

Good story, need more.

Wow. Fanfic SI as Azathoth! Or maybe Nyarlathotep. I find this to be VERY entertaining, and I hope you continue to update.

A very fun read. I was expecting a humorous analysis what -really- happens to all those Self Inserts who merrily jump into their favourite series, similar to Limyaael's "Game of the Gods", but this story went off in a direction I never expected. I've read many quotes about how authors are sociopaths with delusions of godhood. SI tells those critics, "Yes. Yes we are."

Contrary to Adam Epp's review, I found Makoto's morning routine - waking up, taking the bus and walking down the halls of NERV - some of the most interesting stuff of the story because, like you/I Am states, it's interesting to see this rough outline of a background character filled with thoughts and little tics of personality, such as worrying about not owning a car, or spying on co-workers from behind stacks of paper.

As with "When She Smiles", I think this story could stand just fine with this single installment - the ending brings enough of a punch to leave the reader awed and impressed - but there's certainly a lot to explore in this world where God has descended to Earth.