|Reviews for Past lives, Present Problems, and Futures Unknown|
| Guest chapter 1 . 6/11
| animal lover13 chapter 1 . 6/30/2016
| HTTYDlover chapter 1 . 8/12/2014
| aly chapter 1 . 6/25/2013
I'd be interested in reading further
| SnowCat21 chapter 1 . 11/29/2012
this has a really good start i hope to read more
| Guest chapter 1 . 7/13/2012
UG U HAVE TO MAKE IT LONGER TO IT MAN DO IT!
| hannah chapter 1 . 5/22/2011
where is the next chapter? sounds good so far!
| I amm Groot chapter 1 . 11/9/2010
| Victoria62015 chapter 1 . 8/23/2010
This is interesting, don't stop! Please continue!
| xxHaleinaxx chapter 1 . 7/9/2010
Continue pretty please :3 ?
| kt2209 chapter 1 . 7/4/2010
hurry up and write the next chapter!
| Travis Church chapter 1 . 7/4/2010
Long time no talk eh? So anywho, the constructive part of the review.
Words are like chicken, the more you eat it the more you get bored of it. Chicken after a while get's boring and although it seems nice after a while, it just doesn't seem to have the punch as the first time you've had chicken.
You use the words scent, decay, and death (including all it's little mutations such as dead). In the first paragraph, "death and decay" is repeated twice and we read scent four times in the same paragraph. I'm sure you have a larager vocabulary.
What you need to do is to go on and find words that are synonyms. Then take your pick of what you find. Not repeating words is a simple skill that can make your writing more diverse and more eventful to read.
| Darkdagers chapter 1 . 7/3/2010
interesting i like it, cant wait for more.