Reviews for The Criminal Contraptions of Nautilus
kapuchino357 chapter 1 . 12/3/2010
Hi there!

First up, I'd like to say that Ireally like your writing style and am looking forward to reading the rest of this story. Especialy now when I know Natilus isn't as pale as I first thought. And now, let's critisize the content a bit a bit.

First off I'd like to say that you're making a big diffrence between the Flapjack allthe fans know and love and this "Lord" Flapjack who you have turned him in to that is obviously a liar. We all know that's not Flappy's style.

And as farr as I love Nautilus' style and all that I can't help but feel that he's a little GarryStu-ish. And the one thing I hate ALMOST as much as a MarrySue is a GarryStu. But then again, I really shouldn't be one to talk what with my Captain Sharkalsky being a TEENCY bit of a MarrySue herself.

Anyway, I repeat: Great first chapter! And I'm looking forward to reading the rest