Reviews for The Master Manipulator
Cateagle chapter 1 . 7/6/2010
An interesting premise and some arousing imagery, but the quality of the writing needs considerable improvement or a good beta. There's entirely too much telling of action adn information rather than letting things flow; there are also some spelling problems. It's a story I'll follow but it definitely needs a good beta to make it truly enjoyable.
J.A Jasper chapter 1 . 7/6/2010
Well this story is very disturbing, as Harry interested in sexual issues at that early of age is just wrong.

I can see if Harry had the mind of a future self, or had undergone some time travel, yet nothing has happened to make this so.

It is just wrong we you take a 11 year old and give them sexual urges.

If you toned that issue done and corrected some grammar issue this story could be interesting, but unfortunately as it stands it is more just a cliche piece of work.
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