finallyexploded chapter 1 . 5/15/2013
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Reviewer536 chapter 1 . 2/5/2011
Question: Why would two of the most POWERFUL kung-fu masters engage in a Yo Mama contest? I haven't read your first verison of this story, but I suggest that you combine them to form a single story with chapters...?

For one thing, the characters... are out of character. OOC. Remember, these aren't your teenaged friends or buddies in school. Keep the character's opinion in tact. Tai Lung isn't fun and games and I'm sure Po would have a lot more to his personality. Doesn't Tai Lung have a seething hatred for Po, the Dragon Warrior? Why is he behaving as such?

Also, there is a major lack in details. Where are they? What were the tones of their voices? WHY ARE THEY DOING THIS? Also, you ruin the tone when you must write in a skit-format like this. Why not something more along the lines of...(I'm using phrases from your story):

A smirk widened across Po's face. "Yo mama is so skinny," he sneered, "that when she turned to the side, she disappeared!"

The crowd roared in laughter, the majority moaning "OOOH!"

(This is just how I write it. Your story doesn't need to be exactly the same, and please be orignial).

Before you get the idea that I am trolling, listen: I am NOT trying to be a prick. Think. Sit down for a moment and think. Try to impress your readers - and remember, your readers aren't nine year olds. Engage them in something both humorous, but a bit more mature and detailed.

Oh, and if you ARE a troll, please politely leave. I'v noticed that your other stories haven't recieved pleasant feedback.
callmeBaby'08 chapter 1 . 2/4/2011
last one wa good
Welsh Gem chapter 1 . 7/9/2010

ur momma's so sluty, she had thirds of tiger woods

ur momma's so short she needed and id just 2 c da teletubbies.

ur momma's so stupid she sold her car 4 petrol money

ur momma so so skinny u could use her as a credit card

ur momma's so fat when she went on da scales. they blew up

ur momma so fat wen she gave da doc her weight he went i want ur weight not ur phone number.