Reviews for The Road to Yesterday
Guest chapter 4 . 9/24/2014
Charlie is wrong. The person should do both. Compliment AND Completes you. Thats a soulmate.
Edward did neither. He was a whiney, controlling manipulating creep.
Guest chapter 3 . 9/24/2014
I love a story that has a plot that is coherent and makes some sense.
Unfortunately this isn't it. Jake needs to touch a girl while imagining its Bella to calm himself? Because he is angry with Bella? The guy is 18 years old and thinks he should be wwaiting on his first born? WTF? Just about any male in his situation (Bella involved or not) would be sexing left and right. Jakes mindset in this..story... is more like the way girls think. I'd bet the author is a girl. Getting rejected happens. Most people do not have mental breakdowns and then cut themselves off from all human contact. Thats just weird. The other uh..curious thing is, Sue who knows everything her daughter has gone through with Harry's death, with Sam, with phasing, all the pain and anguish Leah has dealt with, is just going to stand there and let knucklehead Charlie speak to her first born daughter like she is a piece of shit? The things Leah is telling Bella is the gospel truth. But Sue is just gonna throw her own daughter under the bus for Charlie and Bella?That just doent work very well and you should rethink that little plot detail.
Guest chapter 3 . 9/24/2014
It would seem to me that Jake, having all that willing female flesh around, and being a young aggressive wolf, would be smart enough to realize that forgetting Bella would be MUCH easier by throwing himself into the womanizing. Makes no sense that a young man who looks like him is pushing all those girls away. Not wanting love? I get that. Not wanting any contact? Thats pretty dumb and its just not at all how the male brain is wired!. Pretty glaring plot hole.
Guest chapter 1 . 9/23/2014
You borrow bits and pieces and wreck them you mean. Another trainwreck of a disaster of a story.
I dont think you even have a single paragraph that works in the context of a bigger story. Nopt only that but Your characters have no redeeming qualities. Nothing to root for. Nothing to want them to make it. Bella is beyond a fool. she deserves Edward. You want to write a story that has Edward as a good "person: but he isnt He is abusive & mysogynistic. But you want the team Dedwards to like your story too. thats what you have not gotten in to your head. You write a story for yourself and hope it finds an audience. You dont write to an audience in hopes they like it. By trying to p[lease everyone you just wind up writing crap.
alixandria chapter 17 . 8/27/2014
Poor jake...
alixandria chapter 16 . 8/27/2014
Huh?!
alixandria chapter 15 . 8/27/2014
Did jake already imprint on bella?! :-) :-) :-) :-)
alixandria chapter 14 . 8/26/2014
They are beautiful together! :-) :-) :-)
alixandria chapter 13 . 8/26/2014
Awww, yay! :-) :-) :-) :-)
alixandria chapter 12 . 8/26/2014
I hope she wins?! :-) :-) :-)
alixandria chapter 11 . 8/26/2014
Awwwww...so sweet! :-) :-) :-) :-)
alixandria chapter 10 . 8/26/2014
Yeah, eddie, back off of j/b! :-) :-) :-) :-)
alixandria chapter 9 . 8/26/2014
Take jacob, bella! :-) :-) :-)
alixandria chapter 8 . 8/26/2014
Gco jake! :-) :-) :-) :-)
alixandria chapter 7 . 8/25/2014
Finally bella! :-) :-) :-) :-)
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