Reviews for The Road to Yesterday
Guest chapter 11 . 4/17
Guest chapter 9 . 4/17
Understand Jakes pain? Bella? Bella Swan? Is that even possible? Not from what 'm reading.. Sure, Bella might try and explain it or EXCUSE it. But undertsand it? No. Bella would have to have a soul...a heart and she just does not. Sh was dead inside long before she ever thought of being a sparkler. I dont believe she is even capable of considering any one else but her own wants.
Guest chapter 6 . 4/17
Missed him so much she was angsting over Jake! Why h why cant someone kill off this useless waste of flesh. Talk about a selfish, evil piece of shit. Having Bella and with Jake is no kid of triumph for jake and could never be his HEA. Like he said Bella does the damage and everyone else has to pay.
Guest chapter 4 . 4/14
Wow that was some pretty silly advice from Charlie. But all the men in the twilight universe seem to like to hang on to women who are barren of both heart and soul. They have no pride, no backbone, no balls. Willing to suffer any and all abuse aand refuse to let go even when they have beautiful women throwing themselves at them. In other words unlike any male...ever.
Compliments but does not complete you? Sounds like a line from a romance advice book!
Guest chapter 4 . 4/14
Edward was manipulating Bella. Telling her to choose life while also telling her there would be no physical relationship until they were married or she was turned. He made her feel weak, unattractive and unintelligent .Questioned her judgement. Edward wanted what he thought he could make Bella, not who she was. When I read stories where-in the writer tries to make eddie some type of benevolent good guy I cringe. He was not. He was a creepy, abusive scumbag who fed Bellas fears and insecurities
Bella let him. She was just as bad.
Guest chapter 1 . 4/14
Haaahaaaa. Jacobs howl branded Bella "deeply". So deeply that she stopped the wedding and took some time to really think about what she was doing and how badly she hurt Jake. Whoops that was an alternate universe. In this one. Bella could give a crap about anyone except herself She could not wait to get to Leech Island and have sex with her dead body... uhh... husband who proceeded to be such a good lover that the morning after Bella looked like she had gone 10 rounds with Mike Tyson. Bruised, scratched and contused. The room ripped apart. Any sane female would have been on the phone with a rape crisis center...Bella pronounced herself...decorated. No heartbeat, stone hard skin, a touch as cold as the grave. But he was pretty. Bella thought it was it was wonderful.
Guest chapter 4 . 4/13
That was just slly. really silly
Guest chapter 2 . 4/13
Bella does not want to punished. she wants to be ABSOLVED. She wants to have no consequences..
But we will surely have yet another ugly fic where Jake has to do the heavy lifting and will still always be number 2. Another marysue type of fantasy where a nempty twisted girl gets some one like jake with no effort. correction where she actively works to hurt him and he eats it all up like candy. A truly ugly piece.
Guest chapter 1 . 4/13
Sounds like ?Bella is living why saddle jacob with this millstone.
Edward is a corpse. A reanimated dead body. n YOUR story she would seem to have no reason to go fuck Jacobs life up. If Bella wants to have sex with cold dead things why stand in her way. The whole problem with almost all oft hese twilight fics is that Bella Never, EVER has to pay the freight on her own bullshit. She treated Jake like a doormat, used him shamelessly, threw her dead body love in his face no caring a whit about what she was doing. She oly ever cared about herself. Why do we need (or want) another story were-in Bella gets another chance to wreck Jakes life. This will simply be more of the same.
Blue Moon chapter 2 . 5/28/2015
It takes two to tango
Blue Moon chapter 1 . 5/28/2015
That was the longest fanfic chapter I have ever read in my life
Guest chapter 4 . 9/24/2014
Charlie is wrong. The person should do both. Compliment AND Completes you. Thats a soulmate.
Edward did neither. He was a whiney, controlling manipulating creep.
Guest chapter 3 . 9/24/2014
I love a story that has a plot that is coherent and makes some sense.
Unfortunately this isn't it. Jake needs to touch a girl while imagining its Bella to calm himself? Because he is angry with Bella? The guy is 18 years old and thinks he should be wwaiting on his first born? WTF? Just about any male in his situation (Bella involved or not) would be sexing left and right. Jakes mindset in this..story... is more like the way girls think. I'd bet the author is a girl. Getting rejected happens. Most people do not have mental breakdowns and then cut themselves off from all human contact. Thats just weird. The other uh..curious thing is, Sue who knows everything her daughter has gone through with Harry's death, with Sam, with phasing, all the pain and anguish Leah has dealt with, is just going to stand there and let knucklehead Charlie speak to her first born daughter like she is a piece of shit? The things Leah is telling Bella is the gospel truth. But Sue is just gonna throw her own daughter under the bus for Charlie and Bella?That just doent work very well and you should rethink that little plot detail.
Guest chapter 3 . 9/24/2014
It would seem to me that Jake, having all that willing female flesh around, and being a young aggressive wolf, would be smart enough to realize that forgetting Bella would be MUCH easier by throwing himself into the womanizing. Makes no sense that a young man who looks like him is pushing all those girls away. Not wanting love? I get that. Not wanting any contact? Thats pretty dumb and its just not at all how the male brain is wired!. Pretty glaring plot hole.
Guest chapter 1 . 9/23/2014
You borrow bits and pieces and wreck them you mean. Another trainwreck of a disaster of a story.
I dont think you even have a single paragraph that works in the context of a bigger story. Nopt only that but Your characters have no redeeming qualities. Nothing to root for. Nothing to want them to make it. Bella is beyond a fool. she deserves Edward. You want to write a story that has Edward as a good "person: but he isnt He is abusive & mysogynistic. But you want the team Dedwards to like your story too. thats what you have not gotten in to your head. You write a story for yourself and hope it finds an audience. You dont write to an audience in hopes they like it. By trying to p[lease everyone you just wind up writing crap.
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