|Reviews for Completion|
| Mantis FA chapter 1 . 7/6
Lovely. I think what he's really saying with his last line here is that since one of them had to bear that pain of arriving first at the camp and fearing for the other's fate, he's glad it could be him - but by facetiously denying that worry, he also absolves her of the irrational guilt she might otherwise feel for causing it.
Gwydion's guilt is also very poignant. Believing that his well-intended order trapped Eilonwy in the fortress to be murdered by the Cauldron-Born or taken by Pryderi's men (and in all probability raped and tortured, then murdered) has to be eating him up inside, when he has no time to spare for grief. Hearing that she was on the battlefield, and may yet be alive, or at least have been spared the cruelest of the possible fates to which his command might have condemned her, would be a small touch of solace on the worst day of his life, and seeing her at Taran's side when he calls the survivors to assemble a much larger one.
| Elen-Di chapter 1 . 4/27
Stop it, I'm crying. You write so beautifully - you really capture the feeling of the series, and I appreciate that so much. Ugh, so many feels.
| Lexie chapter 1 . 1/9/2015
This is a truly beautiful piece you've written. You captured Taran and Eilonwy's relationship perfectly and it only pains me that this was not included in the book. Thank you so much for writing this gem.
| AdventuresInTheSueniverse chapter 1 . 10/30/2014
So good! Your writing is amazing!
| ElwynWanderer chapter 1 . 7/5/2011
That was very touching. I especially liked the line about hearing "harp strings snapping when none actually were."
I wish I could think of more to put in this review, but your amazing writing has left me in shock, and adding anything more at this point would be stating the obvious.
What can I say? You're amazing. )
| BlueNynaeve chapter 1 . 3/13/2011
This is great. Very descriptive. I haven't actually read the series, but this scene is believable from just about any romantic perspective and you have done a really great job of giving enough backstory to ground it.
| Lamarquise chapter 1 . 3/1/2011
| Joseph De Cristofaro chapter 1 . 10/12/2010
as i said about Princess Diaries, very well written. your stories engulf me more than any short stories ever have or quite possibly ever will. i absolutely love your writing.
| terra chapter 1 . 9/2/2010
Thank you so much for this story! It is absolutely beautiful! The characterization is excellent and the plot is wonderful! It was a joy to read this.
| PrydainViolet chapter 1 . 8/17/2010
after a truly miserable day i'm curled up in bed with my laptop, and for no reason in particular i found myself wandering into the old prydain fiction page and i found THIS, and it is beautiful and i'm suddenly overwhelmed with good feelings. i love it and i love you for writing it and i'm so happy that i thought to turn to my prydain friends tonight because if i hadn't i would be going to sleep with a scowl instead of a smile. i know i'm getting overly emotional over a review, but thanks a million - i really mean it. it's a wonderful piece.
| Clio1792 chapter 1 . 8/6/2010
This is wonderful, and beautifully written.
| everlovin chapter 1 . 8/1/2010
Beautiful! Thank you!
| adaon45 chapter 1 . 7/19/2010
I love it! As I commented earlier on the draft, let me add just a few things here.
It's wonderful that you are so adept at finding these blank spaces in the books waiting to be filled in. Alexander's style has a poetic spareness and economy that few authors today aspire to-and, as a result, it's sometimes difficult to find the pregnant gap waiting for us. Great that you took advantage of this one.
So much is spot-on here, especially the descriptions of mental anguish and response to trauma, which capture the grimmer mood of this book. I love the portrait of Gwydion-his underlying guilt about Eilonwy's fate, his "wary hope" (lovely phrase!) that she is still alive.
I think that your putting in a part about Taran's continued anxiety-and his efforts to hold it in check-near the end gave the story a vivid and compelling psychological realism.
And I love the details-such as Taran feeling Eilonwy's silent chuckle in the quiver of her ribs.
Of course, I always hope for more!
| LivEviL chapter 1 . 7/9/2010
Oh, if only you would post a story similar to this once a day! Oh, how happy I would be! :)
| merln chapter 1 . 7/8/2010
So, so, so beautiful! Your descriptions are vivid, the dialogue—particularly Gwydion's—rings true, and you end, delightfully, on a high note (or rather, on the imagined twang of a broken harp-string)! Once again your ability to pull me right into a story, into its moods and fears, astounds me, and makes me want to draw pretty pictures (of which I have made few lately, to my sorrow) or write my own words... I can't express my delight at the notification I received (new story! new story! get it while it's hot!), and I enjoyed it greatly!
Tiny things I would change: "the buoyant curve in her back" I would make "of her back," mostly because that's how I've seen it, and "in" stood out to me :) Also "nearly unnerved" seems a bit mild; "unmanned" seems closer but is always an interesting word to use, even in the more archaic tone this story tends to take... I would add "the" before "recesses of fear" because my heart tells me so ;) My editing, alas, tends to be instinctual, as I learned to read (and read widely) before anyone taught me the "why" of grammar. It just is, isn't it?