Reviews for We are finally heroes
Oren chapter 1 . 8/2/2014
Uhm... this is fucking horrible.

I'm sorry, it just is.

First off, the story format is dreadful. You aren't writing a script, it's a story. If you're writing a story, at least use the original format for fics.

Second off, the characters. Unless it's an X-Over of universes, you can't feature a Sonic character in the No More Heroes universe, otherwise it's totally invalid. Also, if you're going to have characters, don't make their abilities completely irrelevant to the NMH Universe, as this is also invalid.

& please, when you have characters apart of the original universe, don't go OOC. You want them believable, not reacting on part of your will so it will seem that they bow down to your character. That's just desperate.

This seriously needs work. Badly & urgently, unless you want flames.
P.T. Piranha chapter 1 . 12/18/2012
Um... this story is very bad.

First off, script format fics aren't allowed. Also, this is not a text message. Emoticons have no place in a written story.

I do not know who half of these people are, other than Silver the Hedgehog and Travis Touchdown. You can't put in new characters and expect the reader to go along with it. You really need to explain your characters. What are they doing? Why? What's even happening?

This is a MESS, plain and simple. It's a bunch of strangers bickering randomly, until one of them kills Travis for some barely explained reason, and Silver the Hedgehog appears just for the heck of it.

You can't just be completely random, that's not how a coherent story works.

I'm hoping you take this not as an insult, but as a note to improve, but this story is a train wreck.
CadenGallic chapter 1 . 7/19/2012
I feel like i'm missing something here. You introduce characters we don't know, and don't even explain them, no description, no anything really. I'm just confused.
What I can decipher is a self insert turning the otherwise strong protagonist into a quivering mess. Which has been done to tears in a lot of other fandoms.
I really don't know what to say about this, its barely even a fanfic at all.
GC chapter 1 . 5/25/2011
Needs work.
Nigra-tan chapter 1 . 8/21/2010
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