|Reviews for Two|
| anon chapter 1 . 4/12/2012
Just on the first chapter alone this story doesn't flow well. Your description of Bayonetta with everyone knowing who she is is ridiculous. The entire battle to save the earth would be not something either Bayonetta or Jeanne would talk about to every person in the world. Next off Bayonetta according to the games developers has a average sized chest. She is NOT a 34D cup. She is more than likely a large A cup to a small to mid sized B cup at the most.
I don't know if you've even played the game or not but even I could infer that Bayonetta isn't one to just blurt out to anyone in the world "Oh I saved it from such and such". Furthermore Bayonetta won't get dragged to hell if she doesn't fight angels everyday. Nothing in the game nor anything in the wikipedia about it says so.
I think she does it because she enjoys it. All the Umbra witches have magic and use their hair, Jeanne the only other surviving Umbra witch doesn't have to fight angels everyday to prevent herself being dragged to hell and she has the same magic hair and strange creatures that her hair forms into when she needs that extra kill power.
There are so many problems with the first part of this story and this is just the tip of the iceberg.
I hope this review helps and perhaps you will re-write the story to fit more in line with the game itself.
| whazzup3929 chapter 9 . 3/18/2011
nice story!..how much convincing would it take for you to write up a JoyXBayonetta pairing :)
| Artisa chapter 9 . 11/8/2010
Finally finished reading this! Can't even think of enough stuff to say to express how much I LOVED this fic!
FREAKIN HILARIOUS! I mean you got Bayonetta's character down in a nutshell as usual and it was just so funny to see her carefree ways punchline through every one of those serious type moments in the therapy sessions! XD
And the LINES! ROFL my favourite HAD to be the 'pudenda' line - God I just couldn't stop laughing! XD
And I absolutely loved how you made Jeanne and Bayonetta like polar opposites in terms of their outlook on life lol, makes the relationship more interesting! Plus her reaction to Miguel there was just boss! XD
So I kept wincing at the things the angel was calling her but it was funny that she didn't notice, UNTIL he brought Jeanne into it. THAT was really sweet! :D LOL and how long did it take you to come up with the torture ideas? XD XD
Just AWESOME! I'm totally here if you write another brilliant ficcie pal! :D
| Naoemms chapter 8 . 10/24/2010
Oh, and when I say update soon, I mean... MAKE MORE BAYONETTA/JEANNE fanfics! XD
You have skill, I like it.
| Naoemms chapter 9 . 10/24/2010
I love the interaction between Jeanne and Cereza, this is the only reason why I read with utmost enthusiasm.
Thank you so much for writing.
Please, update soon, I'll wait as patiently as possible.
| kristoferrobbin chapter 9 . 10/23/2010
oh my gosh, this story was so beautiful. i absolutely loved it :)
| Archristol chapter 1 . 9/20/2010
Hehe... I don't read a lot of fanfics but this is definitely the best fanfic for Bayonetta. I love your sense of humor and descriptions of Jeanne and Cereza. I'm so sad to see this end. I hope you will write more of these fanfics. Jeanne and Cereza can be put into so many situations that would be amusing and/or tasteful. Haha. I always thought that Jeanne would fit better as a CEO of a clothing line where she is also a designer. She just looks like she has more authority, doesn't she? Jeanne as a teacher is believable as well though, since I read somewhere that she was an Umbran teacher of some sort in the game. Cereza would be a model for sure. She could model for clothes Jeanne designs. :o Anyway, that's my two cents. If any of you are interested, I make amvs. And a recent amv I am working on is a collab for Jeanne/Cereza. This is a part of the reason why I read this fic. Inspiration... Look me up on YouTube if you're interested. :D
| RagerGS8 FF chapter 9 . 9/20/2010
Although I kinda didn't want this fanfic to end, what a great ending! Tons of humor and some sweetness there. Good balance!
AND I WAS BUSTING OUT LAUGHING ABOUT JEANNE IN THE PHOTOSHOOT! I can actually picture her saying that. LOL XDDD
But I do hope that you continue writing fanfics of this kind (preferably fanfics of Bayonetta) because you are an amazing fanfic writer!
Great job and keep up the great work!
| OrganicFantasy chapter 9 . 9/20/2010
This was an extremely fun story to read. I enjoyed it so much that I'm sad to see it end. But you really gave this your all. Good job! :-D
| BioDragon chapter 9 . 9/20/2010
A nice ending to it, I like it :D
| Major Mike Powell III chapter 9 . 9/20/2010
Well, well, soldier...
*O*, LOL and O
This was full of WIN on plenty of levels! :3
A fitting end to a great fic!
Mission complete! N-I-CE work, son!
Now, return to base for debrief and some rest. The drinks are on me.
Semper-Fi! Carry on!
| Tirah chapter 9 . 9/20/2010
Very well done. A great ending to a great story. I genuinely enjoyed reading this, from the beginning to the end.
I didn't notice anything, that would be drastically out of character. Jeanne's behaviour can be perfectly justified by all that mess she's been through in the game and her 500 years of separation from Cereza. Both the characters are very believable.
I'll keep my eye on you and will be looking forward to your next fic. Good luck.
| Espada Harribel chapter 9 . 9/20/2010
Brilliantly written! I love the personas in your story, nicely done. Read it all in one fell swoop, faved it and faved you as well. Fantastic work. I look forward to the one-shot!
Espada Gives This: 5 out of 5 Shark Fins!
| BioDragon chapter 8 . 9/14/2010
Well thats one way to think things through
| Major Mike Powell III chapter 8 . 9/14/2010
Well, well, soldier...
Nice work! Keep it up!
Update ASAP! That's an order!
Semper-Fi! Carry on!