|Reviews for Heaven on His Mind|
| Alice L. Kirkland chapter 1 . 9/11/2013
| Kat.R.777 chapter 1 . 12/12/2010
I really liked this oneshot. The grammar and spelling are pretty good and your writing style is very interesting.
I always love seeing Luke point of view, especially when he's shown to be more than just the villain who hates everyone and wants all of his enemies dead.
I especially liked the part about his soul being the colour of Annabeth and Thalia's eyes but his mind growing darker as time goes by.
I hope to see more oneshots like this one. Hope you're having a good day. Bye.
| Bustedbyherparents chapter 1 . 10/5/2010
Wow. The insight into Luke's thoughts is incredible. Most of us (while reading the books) don't think about how he feels, well, felt. Thanks so much for writing!
| Lieutenant Of Artemis chapter 1 . 8/22/2010
I love this story. So true. It was just like what I imagined Luke would think. And the one Mississippi thing? That's creative. Keep writing.
I found a few grammar/spelling mistakes too though. And hopefully it's more very well written fics like this.
-Lieutenant of Artemis
| imaginethatt chapter 1 . 7/26/2010
When I read PJO, I hated Luke. I hated him for what he did to Annabeth, Thalia, Percy, Camp, and the gods. It is stories like this that remind me he wasn't always like this. Luke did have a heart and a soul, and he wasn't always a monster. I was angry at Annabeth for not being able to let go of Luke and love Percy, but now I understand why she had to hold on.
Great job expressing his child-like emotions and making him vulnerable!
| WindowChild chapter 1 . 7/17/2010
This is... absolutely amazing. Wow.
Your writing is gorgeous, first of all, and I love the imagery. Occasionally the sentences sound a little awkward, but most of the time there's something poetic about them. Wow. Sorry, I'm really speechless here, haha :).
I love the way you wrote Luke. You captured him so well, and I think the light you shed really fits him, but is original at the same time. That's what I love about it. I loved the part where he's talking about Annabeth growing up. The ending made me so sad for him, which was the whole point. I really adored this.
Thank you so much for entering, and I hope to read more of your writing in the future.
| ShadowPalace chapter 1 . 7/17/2010
This was beautiful! I really liked how you split each of the scenes between Annabeth and Thalia, and how you focused it around him forbidding himself to cry. I also thought the whole "second strike" and "one mississippi" thing played out. That was a really creative, nice way to divide up the scenes within themselves. You also have a great writing style as well. :)
Great job, and thanks so much for entering! I'm so sorry that we didn't get your original PM.
| Philo0sophia chapter 1 . 7/12/2010
Excellently written, with apt descriptions of Luke.
| Musafreen chapter 1 . 7/11/2010
Excellent. Another entry. I really need to start searching for the older ones now. :D
I love the scene with Thalia in it. It was a beautiful relationship in canon, and I like the hopelessness in Luke's tone as he describes the Mount Othrys scene. 'the way she used to with monsters', in particular.
I think you could have separated a few sections visually as well as thematically, but that could be just me. *shrugs*
Anyway, it was good. Really well written, and a some of the musings were delicously angsty.
PS: Say Hi to Clara Fonteyn for me, now that she's retired and all. It was always nice talking to her.