|Reviews for The Scarlet Line|
| Lonewritersclub chapter 1 . 2/24
How intelligent you are. Are those history things real? Because seriously if they were you should show this to the Stephenie Meyer herself. This was so smartly written and very pleasant to read. I truly enjoyed it. I hope this will get more readers. You deserve them. Thank you, this was a magnificent story.
| SamanthaAquaMalfoy chapter 5 . 1/12
I think it would be interesting if you did one of these for the Hunger Games.
| HikariKurayami88 chapter 5 . 11/28/2013
The story is good, though not as good as the Harry Potter one. The ending seems rushed and the whole allusion to the tsars... Comes out of nowhere. It jut doesn't seem to have anything to do with twilight.
The story itself also kind of seems short in contrast to the Harry Potter one. You also didn't go into as much detail bookwise.
The speculations about the surviving tsars is half correct. I researched the tsar family once and know for sure that Alexei was found dead. Of course it is possible that one of the daughters survived.
You use language very well. The style in which you present your story is interesting, but I think that the style is what is preventing you in giving a satisfactory ending as well. There is not enough inside detail. A fact which is pronounced by the shortness of the story.
Good work though. You should definetly keep writing
| LadyRainDancer chapter 5 . 11/1/2013
This was just absolutely fabulous, not to say the prequel wasn't, but there wasn't the same air of suspense and mystery, this was much more intriguing and thrilling. An amazing read as always my dear, masterfully written, and perfectly concluded.
| Poloz chapter 5 . 10/26/2013
It's incredible! Such a great story... You know, I don't like whole "Twilight" story, but I really enjoyed reading yours... Can I translate it into Russian (which is my mother language), so others can enjoy it?
| Dina Riddl chapter 5 . 8/23/2013
The end is really surprising :D I don't know how you can imagine this plot but it was an exciting story. And a little bit fun :) Thanks for that
| forTheLoveOfHades chapter 5 . 8/21/2013
| Kirinin chapter 2 . 7/17/2013
"I've seen someone who looks just like him..." I immediately thought, "McGonagall remembers him because he looks JUST LIKE CEDRIC DIGGORY!"
Then I thought, wait. Cedric Diggory represented Harry Potter in your last story... but the thought intrigued me for a moment. :)
| DHouck chapter 5 . 5/21/2013
I do like this story, but his children aren't actually as safe as you imply. Hemophilia is an X-linked recessive gene, which means any sons he has are safe, but any daughters are carriers. His grandsons via daughters would still have 50% chances of hemophilia. Fortunately, my knowledge of this comes from a simple visual impairment which is also X-linked recessive (ocular albinism) instead of something life-threatening.
Also, I'm worried about the loose ends you did not tie up: Edward's overprotectiveness or pre-abusiveness from canon, Alice's caring more about Bella being scared than Jasper being beaten, and the relative ages which can't be reasonable within the usual standards of "looks young".
| Kokotheevilone chapter 5 . 3/8/2013
LOVE IT SO MUCH! And the Harry Potter one is SO AWESOME YES NOW MY MIND IS BLOWN TO FUCKING PIECES. Can you do an Avengers or Doctor Who version? It would be so COOL.
| Sharon T chapter 5 . 12/25/2012
Interesting, I liked the Harry Potter one more but this one was also lovley :) thanks for writing :D
| Redkenja chapter 5 . 12/23/2012
I read The Serpent and the Mirror before this, and might I say you are quite an amazing writer! And well researched! The symbolism you not only have managed to find in the real world and related it to Harry Potter/Twilight is unbelievable, not to mention the psychological aspect of these two works.
I do sincerely hope that you complete another story of a similar nature and my othe ronly hope is that I am familiar with the series when I read it.
| Flying Dragonite chapter 5 . 9/24/2012
OH... that is so cool!
| anf600 chapter 5 . 8/29/2012
Awesome fic - I am forwarding to my daughter who is a big Twilight buff.
| Ae3qe27u chapter 2 . 8/8/2012
We already know that her name's McGonagall, so why bother calling her Ms. M?