|Reviews for A Darker Shade of Light Part I|
| Erastus chapter 19 . 1/5
Just finished. Fantastic story, by far in my top 3 of all time (since 2001). You mentioned in the closing note about your first few chapters not being that great, I disagree, they were amazing just like the rest of your story. I laughed out loud (scaring my wife) when Harry thrust his sword through Voldemort! Looking forward to starting the sequel.
| Erastus chapter 16 . 1/4
Love the story. Very much a WoT and HP fan. You mix them fantasticly and realisticly. Can't wait to read more of your work.
| Guest chapter 19 . 12/30/2013
I just want to say that this is a great story! I have read all of your longer stories and, love them. As many others are, I am awaiting part 2 to be finished. Though I see it has been a while since it was last updated, I hope you can delve back in and complete this exciting crossover. You mentioned that a canon's Harley was started in the middle of these I hope that since you are finished with that one you will be able to finish WOT2. Thanks.
| Steven chapter 10 . 12/16/2013
Well, this review really belongs in the beginning two chapters, but my original plan to wait until I've caught up is not going to work. First off, I want to say that the way you began the first chapter was good, but it left me wanting something different. It just seems like Harry should in where Harry is to Lews Therin as Lews Therin is to Rand. Admittedly a very difficult prospect to pull off, but I feel it could be in there somewhere. More realistically, I felt that the magic of Harry Potter could be a primitive understanding of channeling rather than a separate system altogether. IE, all wizards/witches are effectively wilders, and the belief that they must use wands and incantations is their block. That could come in later to explain how powerful wizards like Dumbledore seem to sense other magics - their control is such that even being wilders, they can see the weaves.
The next comment is more character development than worldbuilding/combining. Harry's and Ginny's relationship in the first couple of chapters just seems out of place for them. It doesn't really make sense to me that they became so close so fast when in the books it took them much more time. (And not a fan of the aside implications, but that's more of a personal thing than a critique on the writing). In such a crossover, it would seem to me that the best way to develop the characters is to keep them as they are in the original until the point when they actually cross over, but that's just one person's opinion.
And another character note, I don't see Moiraine as being one to complain so much as when she first entered the Wizarding world. It is a good introduction to the way a Randlander would think of it, it just doesn't seem in her character.
Finally, I'm supposing you probably wrote this before this last observation appeared in the books, but I just have to say that the Black Tower divided into Ajahs with an Amyrlin Seat as leader didn't happen. And Rand was officially the head of the Black Tower, although I can definitely see him putting Harry in as acting head (M'hael) rather than Taim if he had the chance and Harry had proved himself trustworthy.
Overall though, the story is good. I'm looking forward to seeing how Voldy deals with a ta'veren.
| Alkiera chapter 19 . 5/29/2013
Very cool story! It did take a few chapters to really get going, but I appreciated the way time was handled later; we didn't need a day by day description of Harry in Rand's era. Looking forward to the sequel.
| molyneux chapter 8 . 4/9/2013
And after having read all the stuff before, is this really the cross over?
| molyneux chapter 5 . 4/9/2013
All the sudden lovey dovey stuff is nauseating. The sudden love and his inability to control the sudden urge that he feels for Ginny makes no sense what so ever. He gets one letter from her and that’s it. I just hope that the letter was charmed or something as that would be more believable.
| Jennie Arnold chapter 3 . 3/26/2013
The story is following Harry Potter almost to a T. I can't wait to see how Harry reacts to the Wheel of Time universe!
| borg rabbit chapter 19 . 10/18/2012
The insane abound
Stormy in a straight jacket
| borg rabbit chapter 17 . 10/18/2012
Love and haiku:
Their spirit renew
Rising to a heavenly view
Kiss the light’s bright bloom
| borg rabbit chapter 16 . 10/18/2012
My love in her hands
Parting the mist’s revetments
Smiling heart so full
| DamionKenley117 chapter 19 . 9/4/2012
I-wha-SNAPE?! He's-? Sonofabitch.
| DamionKenley117 chapter 15 . 9/3/2012
So...not to poke holes in an otherwise workable fix, but...the wands are ter'angreals. To use them requires a prescribed set of motions and activation phrases and even the barest capability of channeling on your own, even if you never learn. Awesome. Except the part where you've got actual channelers watching the wand made weaves, committing them to memory, and later using them, presumably. Despite the small issue of gender difference.
...anywhere else that would sound sexist. I love Robert Jordan.
Anyway, you also mentioned that the wards around Hogwarts are definitely wrought by both. Granted, that could be cause the school was founded by people who didn't play with toys, but still. The wands are ter'angreals, which means they are not limited by the users gender. Unfortunately, going by sight is. Worse, many ter'angreal weave inverted webs.
A smaller one, but how the hell do you explain the Power being responsible for the bat-bogey hex? Ron's slug barfing?
Oh, and I love time travel. Poor Harry has put his experiences with the WoT crowd behind him, and Moiraine probably sees this as the next part of her life, moving on. The fail thing about this is...the Wheel of Time is actually set in the future. Yeah, blah, turning of the Wheel, neither beginnings nor endings, Ages come again. Have you ever payed attention to some of those legends they mention offhand? Amarasu and the Sword of the Sun? Sounds like the japanese goddess Amaterasu to me. My favorite though was Merk the giant, with the flaming spear that reached around the world. That's America, and the good old ICBM. So, amusingly Moiraine is back in the First Age, before the (re)discovery of the One Power and the Age of Dreams, the Second Age. Unless she's still bound by the Oaths, she may very well live to see the dawn of that Age.
| DamionKenley117 chapter 12 . 9/2/2012
Interestingly, not all magic in the Wheel of Time is of the Power. Dreamers are not always channelers. Wolfbrothers aren't either. I only make this point because for a bunch of people using magic that is not channeling, there's an awful lot of the Power coming out of their wands.
| DamionKenley117 chapter 8 . 9/2/2012
The most immediate problem I have with this so far is how in hell you're going to top Tarmon freaking Gaidon. There's a crossover here, somewhere between Halo and the Forgotten Realms. Which would be better if the UNSC weapons were not drastically overplayed, and there's a very good set-up for a sequel. Except for that part where the climax involved a multiversal war between a unified Abyss and the rest of everything. Master Chief and Cortana in a massively overpowered Forerunner suit supped up with divine and arcane magics in a fight against Demogorgon that made the battle between Fedman Kazad and the Shrike (Hyperion Cantos, go read it) look like a five second slap fight.
So, yeah. Topping what is implied to be the LAST Battle is gonna be hard.