|Reviews for My Eyes Are Finally Open|
| Maggie chapter 1 . 7/12/2014
Hello! This is a very cute story, but one thing that bothered me was the speech patterns. As a born and raised Texas girl, I have a drawl. A slow, and painful drawl. Think Southern Belle.
Because of this, it bothered me when neither Bella or Jasper had accents (I'm sorry if this is a really old story and you don't care, but just in case you ever edit it or write another story with Texans).
Some common words (and how I'd spell them);
Y'all (you all)
Ain't (isn't that: and I use ain't rarely, Mama says it sounds trashy)
Sorta (sort of)
Kinda (kind of)
S'alright (it's alright)
I also don't pronounce the 'g's in a word, for example;
And sometimes, I've caught myself slurring words, so they'll be a bit more... Like, instead of just, I'll say Jus'.
Most people use contractions here too, so no "I am," it's usually "I'm,".
I really hope this is some use in the future...
| karen Whitlock Cameron Lahote chapter 3 . 3/20/2014
AM LOVING IT SO FAR :D
AS LONGEST YOU DONT TURN DEM IN TOO ANIMAL MUNCHERS ITS ALL GOOD LOL
| jenn008 chapter 11 . 4/4/2013
| Steelersgirl101 chapter 11 . 8/8/2012
I love it so much
| Eris Potter-Charmed Child chapter 11 . 2/16/2012
| TheYumeTsumetai chapter 3 . 11/7/2011
What. A. Bitch! ALICE, SERIOUSLY!
| wendy1969 chapter 11 . 9/25/2011
| edger2deadly chapter 11 . 9/25/2011
Brillant. Perfect Ending :)
| soulsistersinaslan chapter 11 . 9/25/2011
I am sad to this end, but it was a very good story.
Congratulations on a job well done.
| Purple Fire Dragon chapter 10 . 9/20/2011
write soon please
| Perfection's-bloody-flaw chapter 10 . 7/2/2011
One: I LOVE this story and it's good.
Two: Try and check you punctation and sentences more though even i can't talk :D
Three: I know what you mean. Exams, ExAmS and EXAMS!
Four: Try and keep writing YOU ROCK
| Jazzysbellamarie chapter 10 . 6/20/2011
good story so far hope there is more to come soon
| greeneyelover chapter 9 . 6/1/2011
I don't want to offend you, but I think you can do better than this story. You have some good elements in this fic that can make for a good story, but you seem to be throwing in every dramatic element known to this fandom to give your story a plot. That isnt necessary, really. If you pick one direction (for example; jasper, bella, charlotte and peter being a family and accepting rose and emmett) and be descriptive and give the characters life and emotions and feelings you will find you do not need to add OC's, or pointless cheating or any other random plot device to make your story interesting.
I hope you continue to practice writing and Im sure you will be great.
| edger2deadly chapter 10 . 5/31/2011
Well that was an alright chap, love how all 17 r outside waiting for the volturi, sweet as. Hope the Whitlocks kick their sparkly asses. More plz
| wendy1969 chapter 10 . 5/31/2011
i do hope you can update more often on this one. i do like it.