Do you not know how to put blank spaces between the end of a sentence and the start of a new one. It's a grammatical rule to use two blank spaces when ending and starting new sentences. You're not using any which shows a lack of education. You can't just combine more than one word AND punctuation marks as if they are all one word. The first time I would have put it down to a one time typo, but you're quite consistent with this f-kup... You're also over and misusing the Colon and Semi-Colon, as well as over hyphenating words (some of which are never hyphenated and never have been). One is never used in a story unless there is a list or memorandum in the storyline, and the other is, but only rarely...

Fun story. Your Charlie was one of the most Hanalei fanficcharacters I've ever had the pleasure to read.

Still wonder about Jacob ... and I do feel bad for him. Not the biggest Jacob fan, but I think he does deserve his hea too. At least you left it open ended.

Honestly I'm a bit disappointed she ended up murdering Frank. They easily could put him in jail for statutory rape. Its easy enough to prove they had sex. Given Bella's age they don't even have to prove there was no consent.

I feel bad for Jacob. Not that I don't completely sympathize with Edward wanting a suitor for his 2 year old daughter, but he didn't ask to imprint other daughter. Hessian if stuck with it. We'll see if fate was kind or not here.

Well, that certainly went more smoothly than Breaking Dawn. I wonder what sort of vampire traits she may have, if any.

And of course there's the potential of Jacob and imprinting. We'll see if that becomes an issue.

Part of me wanted to read Charlie go on trial, but this was probably better. For everyone.

Hopefully the wolves won't be a problem.

I'm a little surprised Charlie is only being charged with breaking a restraining order. He fired a fire arm in a crowded dinner. Even if Bella and Jasper don't press charges surely the authorities can charge him for something.

I think Bellas plan was as brilliant as it was flawed. Given Charlie's short fuse, it was smart to publicly force Charlie's hand ... they gave Charlie enough rope to hang himself.

But if Bella completely got her way she and her child would have been killed. And I think that shows the danger of the Cukkens going along with anything and everything Bella says. Shes still a scared teenage kid and sometimes they need to be adults and tell her no.

Edward is a lot more open to turning Bella here than in Meyers book. Course, its a different Edward all around. At this point he's basically going to giver her anything she wants. And I'm not entirely sure that's a healthy relationship either. He's going from being controlling to being complunable to say no to her. Neither is really a true partnership of equals. Its just going from one extreme to another.

The criminal case definitely seems scarier, since there's not a lot of physical evidence proving Charlie's guilt.

There's obviously Bella and Edward's testimony. And perhaps the guy who raped Bella ... if he decides to protect himself rather than Charlie, it hurts Charlie.

I would think that's at least enough to put him on trial, though not necessarily enough to win.

I don't know what to think of Renee. We're told she does love Bella, but she's still willing to sell her out for a lousy gran. I have trouble buying that.

Glad to see Charlie getting schooled. He really had no choice given the mountain of evidence he practically hand delivered to the court. Leaving message threatening Bella for example ... how could he not know that would bite him in the behind? He's a law enforcement officer himself... he should know better.

Disappointed in Edward making a fool of himself and giving team Charlie the one check in the plus column. He's clearly too stupid to be allowed in the courtroom. And should have been left at home with Rosie. Him breaking an entering and attacking Charlie earlier in the story also could have hurt them. They're lucky Charlie didn't press that.

Wow, Renee is way worse than I imagined. I was expecting her to be indifferent but not openly hostile.

I wonder what her motive even is for showing up.

At least Bella doesn't have to straight up drink blood like she did in Breaking Sawn. This pregnancy isn't exactly a cake walk, but its not the horror of Breaking Dawn either.

I was wondering if the cop who raped Bella would ne brought up again. I'll be interesting see how the Cullens deal with him later.