|Reviews for Wand Cores|
| Paty S chapter 5 . 4/2
Ong harry totally blow up the plan by telling him...don't know what his game his but we will see.
| Paty S chapter 3 . 4/2
Great story so far, and tom riddlle always makes me laugh when you write is POV I don't know why but is disgust for everything and everyone is amusing.
Harry seems to be perfectly portrait as a simple, guy with an hero complex that leads him to more danger than usual.
Cant wait to see there relationship develop.
| dancesontrains chapter 36 . 3/29
I was hoping to leave a longer comment as my review, but damn. Damn.
| Luna Latanya chapter 29 . 3/29
| Arathiana chapter 49 . 3/26
I read this fic in a day and a half. I closed myself off from my family and friends, shirked my responsibilities, turned off my phone and have only left the comfort of my room for food and bathroom brakes. It was just that captivating. (Of course now people are wondering if I've died or been kidnapped or abducted by aliens since they haven't heard from me lately... don't care, totally worth it :P).
Before I started reading I honestly thought this would just be some mindless disturbing and graphic (given the "m" rating) slashfic, though I was curious as to why it had so many hits. Boy am I glad to have been wrong, I LOVE the fact that the plot doesn't entirely rely on the romance factor but it is actually very articulate and complex. And the characters' growth (especially tom's) throughout the story is believable and realistic, not at all OOC for any of them. It seems that as the chapters progress, Tom and Harry's vocabularies get more and more similar, obviously a result of their blooming relationship.
The romantic element of the story, I'll admit, I thought would be really disturbing and perverted but, again, I was proven wrong. You made it seem like the most natural thing in the world, like Harry and Tom couldn't NOT love each other, and what's even more beautiful is that it starts as friendship (or at least mutual respect and admiration) and does not in any way seem forced.
Tom has to be my favorite character out of the bunch, from an arrogant, spiteful little shit he slowly evolves into a not-quite-odious-but-still-arrogant-little-shit , capable of great love but also of great hatred and with a mind full of contradictions.
I'd write so much more but it's currently 12:45 at night here and I'm afraid I'm about to collapse from exaustion (but that's what happens when you binge-read 49 chapters of fanfiction... teeheehee).
Just know that I love everything about your story, I'm not even exaggerating, and wish you all the best.
You've mentioned before in some A/Ns that you felt guilty for not updating in a while... well... DON'T feel guilty, I'm serious. Take all the time you need to write and update only when you're ready. I'm very sorry about you're mother, it must be awful to have to deal with that and I have the utmost respect for you. I probably wouldn't have been able to write anything if I were in that situation, grief tends to make me almost catatonic. Again, I wish you all the best and hope you're all right
Note to self: write reviews during the day when you have full control of your cognitive faculties and don't end up rambling like a madman... T.T
| Anna chapter 48 . 3/24
Oh gosh this updated (a while ago) and I finally discovered the new chapter. I think I've read this story several times, and it enchants me every time. So excited about all the plot and stuff.
| potterbuncker chapter 49 . 3/23
This fic is absolutely amazing, I've been reading it for a few days now, and am in love. I can understand why you chose to change Toms history, having him adopted and such. What I really wanted/want to see, is Harry reading from Tom's diary the entries that occurred right when Harry became a teaching assistant. To describe Toms first impression of Harry. Thanks for sharing.
| Originality-Report chapter 49 . 3/22
I know this may not be to authors' liking, but I'm one of the readers that catches up completely before leaving a review. Sorry :/
This story is fantastic. Seriously amazing. I hope that you're still serious about not abandoning this story. I would have a very long mourning period if that is no longer the case.
I hope to see an update soon! :)
| Boo chapter 49 . 3/19
| WitchVela chapter 49 . 3/4
this chapter weighs one down alongside the characters - well done keep writing.
| Konohamaya Uzumaki chapter 49 . 2/17
I know it's been a while since you last updated but i really hope you haven't given up on this story it is the best Harry/ Tom fic i have ever read. It focuses on their relationship while not making them seem OOC. You've totally nailed their characters which isn't easy so good job!
| Guest chapter 49 . 2/2
This is one of the best Harry potter fan fics I have ever read. You are a brilliant writer with a gift for describing human interactions. I can not tell you how much I appreciate the fact that you put your gift out for all to see. I have gained many hours of pleasurable reading time from you and look forward to what your clever little mind will think of next. I love how you altered the plot in such a way that it would be believable if it was added onto the cannon. Beautiful work ma'am! Absolutely beautiful.
| Guest chapter 49 . 1/27
I love this story so much. I've been reading for years and just reread it all to catch up and get up to speed again. I hope you'll continue writing it and finish the story, I'm eager to see how this one ends!
Thank you for being such an amazing writer, your work is great! 3
| Guest chapter 49 . 1/20
oh, the poor boys!
this is a very interesting story you've written here!
you've got me biting my nails hoping it'll all resolve well! especially for young tom (which isn't something i usually end up typing, so good on you for that)
| Chaelie chapter 49 . 1/12
Quite the cliffhanger, there. I'm interested to see how the situation resolves. I'm also curious about the little "Voldemort will never die" bit.
There's quite a few typos, such as additional words and misspellings. They were not overly detrimental, but in a few earlier chapters they did make reading a bit confusing at times. But then again, I'm sure you're aware of them, and the mistakes did seem to abate somewhat as the story went on.
The prose is very...grandiose. I do enjoy it as a whole; the language is pretty and the descriptions are unique. Sometimes, however, I do wonder if they don't go...well, a little overboard with the adjectives. Occassionally they felt somewhat redundant, and more list-like than artistic.
I truly admire how comprehensive your descriptions are. It's just that...hmm. Less can make more of an impact, sometimes. Less is more, to be cliche. I enjoy Riddle's pretentiousness, I really do, and the phrasing definitely contributes to that. But while writing is wonderful when it's descriptive, it's also wonderful when it's concise.
I would find myself skimming during the less plot-necessary portions, because I didn't -need- to read a lot of it. I don't need to read constant descriptions about how exquisite, beautiful, temptuous, alluring, and elegant Tom Riddle is (or Harry, for that matter). It's a hard thing to forget, even if you only mentioned their sexiness every once in a while. :P
...Additionally, I see very few differences between Riddle's thoughts and speeches than Harry's. Harry's PoVs are supposed to be more "blunt", according to one of your ANs, but he'll use verbose language like "pulchritudinous" and "Machiavellian" (just off the top of my head), making the diction and syntax remarkably similar to Tom's. Clever or not, I just have a hard time believing his choice of words, at times. Clever doesn't always mean imposing vernacular. There's other types of intelligence, and I think Harry's different type of clever than Tom, and I love that Tom can appreciate that. I do think you captured that with his war-instincts and social ease.
Your vocabulary is incredibly impressive, far more impressive than mine, but sometimes I do wonder if Tom (or Harry) would actually -think- these words so frequently (pretentious little git or not :P). For instance, even if I know what the "thoracic cavity" is, when in the middle of passionately kissing somebody, I have a hard time believing that anyone would really think of it like that when "chest" is just so much more readily available.
The extent of someone's vocabulary isn't always immediately present in the way they think; accessibility and circumstance play a role in their use...and in a similar fashion, a lot of these words aren't accessible to the audience. It became a tiny bit tiring, constantly reading large and unlikely words. I love looking up words while I'm reading, finding out their meanings—and in this I'm a little bit strange, I think—but at times I did grow weary.
Crap, I feel like I'm casting aspersions on things I actually feel conflicted about. Okay. I'll try to explain. I said that I love your descriptions, which is true. And then I seemed to go off on a long diatribe on a few things I didn't like: the reason I went so in depth, however, is so that I can explain -specificially- what parts I thought could, perchance, be improved (although preferences in writing, as I'm sure you know, are often largely based on personal opinion). So my appreciation is deeper than the mild annoyance I would occassionally feel.
I really hope this comes out right. Sorry, it's just, I read this all in one go, so I have a lot to say. And I really liked it, or else I wouldn't have read it so quickly, and I would not have much to say at all.
Okay, I'm going to do this one more time. I loved the interactions between Tom and Harry. They're deep, meaningful, and wonderfully dysfunctionally functional (that only makes sense with this story, but I think you'll know what I mean). Tom is witty, and I adore how he grows comfortable enough around Harry to exhibit his true intelligence and personal brand of humor. I often found myself snorting unattractively at their comebacks and manipulations.
I thought, in particular, that the ice cream scene was surreal and entertaining. They went a little overboard, which I found slightly gauche but oddly endearing. I was smiling by the time Tom finished describing sinful, lustful chocolate. And it was cute how downright appalled he was by Harry mixing vanilla with coffee. Oh no! Such a terribly inapt choice, Harry Potter.
I also thought Tom's interactions with his fathers excellently done. I got a little bit teary with both of them, to be honest. I though Harry was incredibly clever, too, with the way he manipulated the conversation. When Hornby said something along the lines of "Mr. Potter, maybe your time would be better spent on another child, there are plenty who would appreciate the attention more", I thought it was a horrible misstep...But Harry turned it into a touching moment when he countered and asked why Hornby never traded out Tom. Whoo.
I'm interested in the implications of Tom's sister, too. :D
...Although I do have a very, very mild criticism for Harry's and Tom's discourse. Now, I know that they are not in any way whatsoever normal; Tom, at least, is a prodigy. He's going to speak differently than the rest of us, especially when he realizes Harry's acceptance. Harry will probably speak more intelligently, as well, in response.
But sometimes, despite taking this into account, their interactions don't feel...natural. Their back-and-forths feels weighted down, sometimes, by long monologues and speculation. They say things that sound intelligent when the reader is skimming through, but sound terribly awkward and clumsy if you actually speak them. Their words sound exactly like their thoughts, but...when someone speaks, it tends to be more concise, and more of a quick summary than a second-by-second replay of every little thing that crosses their mind.
Especially with the extensive descriptions in between every sentence (or paragraph) that they speak, I would become very aware of the fact that I'm reading this, and these things would sound strange out loud.
...I'm not sure I'm making sense.
Anyway. I liked your speculation (although I think this I saw this in an AN?) on how Grindelwald tried to protect Dumbledore's grave from desecration. There's not much canon evidence from the books (that I'm aware of, at least), although I've read plenty of fics which speculate. While I've certainly seen fics done well for both Grindelwald loving him and not, the evidence is generally the author taking creative liberties. There's easy evidence for Dumbledore loving Grindelwald; he waited several long years of bloody war before facing him, and then left him alive in the end. But not much to prove that it wasn't one-sided.
Of course, I might argue that Grindelwald had many many years to reflect on his past while imprisoned in Nurmengard. I feel like his love for Dumbledore would be very warped (have you read "Twist of Fate"? I'm absolutely fascinated by that interpretation of Grindelwald), and that he might've denied it forever for his cause, perhaps until the very end, his respect evident only when faced with inescapable death at the hands of a madman looking for a wand. I somehow doubt he would've admitted his feelings even if Dumbledore went to visit him...
Wow I just went on a rant of speculation. If you can't tell, I am extremely excited by the canon implications. :D :D :D So exciting. Thank you for sharing that insight.
Speaking of speculation. I wonder if Dumbledore longs for socks at this age. I think the sentimentalities still work (Harry's and Dumbledore's exchange of meaningful looks) because of Legilimency, but he isn't that famous yet, is he? Not until he defeats Grindelwald. So I wonder if he'd keep getting books and flagrant books, yet.
Anywayyyyy. The expansion on the wand cores is intriguing, as is the addition to the Hallows. I do wonder how long Harry was knocked out by the stunning curse; will he be late in saving Tom? I suppose Tom's "crossroads" is fast approaching. And The Gaunt Shack! Uh ohhh. Looks like Tom's going to meet that side of the family, after all.
Thanks for posting! Sorry about all the rambling. 49 chapters. I had a lot to say. Oh! Although, did you consider putting an "underage" warning? I started reading because I assumed the relationship wouldn't start until he was at least a "wizarding" adult (17), but that turned out not to be the case. I find it...well, uncomfortable. If it becomes more than kisses before 17 I'll admittedly probably stop reading. I just...I know he's mature and all, I just. Hmmm. Would've liked the warning. (Although if I just didn't see it, then mea culpa, ignore meee...I am a terrible person)
WOW I just can't shut up. To be fair it's like 4 in the morning, I get permission to ramble when it's this early in the morning, don't I? T.T
Yeah no. Okay. I'm done for real this time. Again, thank you for posting! I enjoyed this.
And...it's not really my place, but I do wish you well with your mother and Law school.