Wow I just realized (to my own embarrassment) that I have commented on this specific fic before already but I guess that just shows how much I really enjoy it, thanks again ; v ;

I just wanted to say that while it's been years since you've updated any of your Phantasy Star fics, I always come back to reread them. Your way of writing for the series (especially Kain) is one of my all time favorites among what few fics you can find of the series; Thank you for all that you've written for this series!

I just wanted to say thank you for this fic, ever since I played Kain's text adventure I wondered what happened between him and Sue and you seem to answer it for me! I really like how you write Kain and the others too, while idk if you plan to finish or not, I like what you have so far and would like to see more some day!

After three years, not a lot to say, really. The chapter is an extension of the previous one, and the character interactions were fun. Rudo eating the cake (I remember that part from the game!), Nei being chirpy, Anna having a carrot up her...you know (actually, it's kind of interesting; I'd never thought of her that way, and it's nice to see her presented as being different than Alys Brangwin given their substantial similarities in game terms, character figure, etc.).

On another point, it being three years and all, I reread the first two chapters before this one, and my eye hit this line in Chapter 1: "Motavia was a world on the go, one that rushed everyone into adulthood for reasons Kain didn't understand." I like that, because it gives a nod towards the surprising youth of the PCs despite the game being set in a modern sci-fi society instead of a fantasy setting which would naturally lean towards early adulthood, and so acknowledging in the narrative this JRPG convention.

Looking forward to the next chapter; it's nice to see you back and writing for PS!

Ahh, more excellent stuff. Though I would say right off that while this may spoil *why* Anna joined the party, it does leave out the more important question of *how*, which is the entire point of writing the story (heck, anybody's "why" can be summed up in one sentence, after all; it's the how of it and the interactions surrounding that fact that matter).

Kain's characterization continues to be entertaining, meanwhile, and I love Nei's appearance here! Anna's frustration with her is funny (and so believable-while Nei is anything but a liability in battle, her uninhibited-and unsocialized-personality is guaranteed to get on the well-controlled Guardian's personality in about three seconds flat). Best of all, though, is the strong sense of just where Kain is coming from, his continuing frustration with the dead-end confines of his life and his search for freedom (his envy of the Native Motavians can be clearly seen whenever he refers to them, too...) so it can be seen just why he would join up with the group.

Nice batting average, Pink! So far, you're batting at least .850, as far as I can see.;)

In case you can't tell, I love the chapter. I think you should have continued past Kain's meeting with Nei more, but this is still quite good. I'm assuming that you're going to have a third chapter? I think otherwise, this is kind of a weak ending.

Anyway, love this, and as always, looking forward to more(of this story, or your origin series).

Can I just say for the record that I JUST LOVE HOW YOU WRITE KAIN.

*Caps off*

Wow, this story has me seriously interested! You have this way of writing, where you (unintentionally?) have a cliffhanger of sorts at the end, and I just yearn for more. Yes, yearn.

So... I'm definitely looking forward to the next chapter.

Hmmm...the effectiveness of this chapter will be dependent on how fast you get the second chapter out (it'll work just fine when the fic is finished and we're reading the story in one gulp), because it's a little short but stops at the right point for a prologue-Kain has severed ties with his previous life, we're introduced to his poverty, his wrecker abilities (it's not entirely clear if the destruction of the robot is due to technique use or just the spontaneous destruction that the U.S.-but not Japanese-version suggests he can cause, but either is okay), and his punk-like nature, then sets him out for the next stage in his life that'll eventually lead him to be a PC.

I like the breakup in that I can look at it and say, "Aw, poor Kain" but at the same time see Sue's points as well.

One typo I saw: "short circuited" should have a hyphen. (Heh, "oops"!)

Don't accept anonymous reviews, huh? Can't say I blame you.;)

Excellent addition to your 'series'. It's kinda sad to see Kain's 'origin story' start out so bad, considering his character in your other stories. At any rate, no complaints this time (i.e., no typos). As always, look forward to the next chapter!