Reviews for The 14th Juunishi
PeytonYukiLover chapter 5 . 4/27/2013
Hey, awesome story! I read the whole thing, trust me. But, I was trying to go back when I remembered...I FORGOT TO REVIEW! And your story was so great, I just had to stop where I was and...wait a second...HOLY CRAP I'M STARTING TO SOUND JUST LIKE AYAME!(LOL)Anyway, your story really was great. PLEASE SEQUAL IT!(or however you spell that :})
Sage Nova Noah Lotus chapter 6 . 8/21/2012
Amazing touched my "icy black excuse of a heart"
thats what people say about me
me is like Hana when you know me or Uo when you dont
cuddlykittehs chapter 1 . 1/14/2012

hey,despite this short descrption of chartor, can i at least get Breast size?


*shakes head slowly*


jeffhardyluvsme chapter 6 . 4/25/2011
AWWWW! It was soooooooo pretty, I can't believe taht more people haven't reviewed, well then they are asswipes. I found the story very cute and personally I think that you should write a sequal! Thanks!

Tiryn chapter 6 . 10/8/2010
That was so sweet! I love this!
xXxScarletxXxSakuraxXx chapter 6 . 9/28/2010
very interesting and original plot and character
Spread A Little Happiness chapter 6 . 8/12/2010

So I really liked this story and was really sad to see it end after only six chapters! I know this sounds bad but I do have a little but of critic for you. One thing I think you need to work on is your descriptions. Try making them as original as possible and you'll be sure to capture the reader's attention.

Also be afraid to use the word 'and'. Your sentences tend to be very short and blunt. I'd maybe try writing small one shots and reading other people's writing to try and improve your own. Even readinga actual books can help. Once you figure out what your problems are you can easily fix them!

Your writing doesn't need that much work but personally I found the story a little hard to get into, to immerse myself in. This may be one of the reasons why you're not receiving as many reviews as you would like. Your writing will improve but it does take an awfull lot of pratice. Even the most famous writers still practice and try to learn as much as they can. Before you write another fanfic I would take what I've said into consideration.

I'm not flaming your story so please don't think I am! You really do have a talent for writing. Now all you need to do is perfect that talent!

Looking forward to seeing future stories,

Spread A Little Happiness

fudgecakebrownies chapter 6 . 8/9/2010
NAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAW CUTE ENDING I LOVES IT You made me obsessed after the third chapter :DDDD
Animic chapter 2 . 7/20/2010
Oh, I hope it turns into a Haru/OC pairing but that's just me. Those are my favorite (: I loved it when Haru answered her favorite flower for her. I thought that was cute. Update soon!
Animic chapter 1 . 7/19/2010
This sounds like a really interesting story! Please update soon! :)
x.Mommiya Ichigo.x chapter 1 . 7/19/2010
I love this story and its only chappie no. 1! please update soon!