Reviews for Cross Fire
Anonymous chapter 1 . 8/22/2014
Hate it! A/h not monkeys!
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Axel chapter 1 . 6/25/2014
Ha! I knew it all along! How could Holly not be!?
claraowl chapter 1 . 6/22/2014
That was cute.
pine swiftwings chapter 1 . 10/4/2013
That is so crazy amazing! I never expected holly 2 b the one who was monkey! Coolest fanfic evar!(other then mine!) ;-) :-D
Guest chapter 1 . 9/8/2013
Seriously?! She's Monkey?!
Omnitroid chapter 1 . 7/16/2013
Wasn't that ALREADY in the book? I mean, it looks like you just copied and pasted.
Juliegirl22 chapter 1 . 4/26/2013
This was good. Much better than mine, but mine was just for sh*ts and giggles, not a contest. :) How did you come up with the name Dione?
Archangel's Blade chapter 1 . 1/23/2013
*slams head on keyboard* ha;oeijfa;sdlgha[woifj
WHAT?! Holly's monkey? That's unusual, to say the least. Not that I have anything against monkey people, of course. Being homophobic is stuipid. Let me go into rant mode for a minute:
*rant mode initiated*
HOLLY AND ARTEMIS WERE BORN FOR EACH OHER! WAT?!
*rant mode deactivated*
Okay, glad I got that out. Now, onto the rest of my thoughts.
written, I noticed not real plot holes, save that Vinyaya died, but this is your fic, so you do whatever.
gramatical errors, as far as I can tell.
in character, I think.
This is just my opion, but I think that you did a very good job with this. 10 out of 10 for originality.
Guest chapter 1 . 1/5/2013
that was awesome holy carp that was an awesome fanfiction
FowlFanGirl chapter 1 . 6/3/2012
Shame coz I like AF/HS... aww well :)
wack sparrow chapter 1 . 12/16/2011
Oh man, this was awesome! So exciting, I went ape-sh*t by the end. ;)

And then I thought, silly me - monkey
J.Shoot.Me chapter 1 . 6/9/2011
I don't know much about monkeys and that's okay with me ... except, maybe; do they still bananas?

However I read this with the impression it was a romantic fic. Can you please tell me where the romance is? I can find the humor on my own, but the romance is completely lost to me. Maybe the monkeys get it?

Now for my serious and therefore banana free commentary on your writing. You did fine after you seemed to, 'get going.' If I were you, I'd seriously consider deleting the entire first paragraph as, inconsequential and therefore boring descriptive ramblings. AND as that was my "first" impression of your work, and that's what you asked for ... well, there it is.

jsm
Agnostic Mathematician chapter 1 . 4/13/2011
Holy fudge. O_O

Holly is a 'monkey'?

...

You know, that's kinda hot.

Especially her being a LEPrecon Officer.

Dee's really lucky. :P

But still, no AH? D:
Astrid-Elizabeth-Dare chapter 1 . 4/2/2011
*Falls over laughing* Wow! You were right I did get a kick out of that! :D That was great!

I do find it really shocking that Holly is a 'monkey'.

I had ment it wasn't right to make characters 'monkey''s not that I have anything against 'monkey''s. But still this was great. I also would have expected Orion to propose in a more poetic and sappy way. The way he did it reminded me more of Artemis. But still it was hilarious! *still laughing on the floor*
I'm a Lover not a Hater chapter 1 . 3/7/2011
Didn't expect that. But I guess it's possible.
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