|Reviews for Brock's plan|
| Advance shipper chapter 1 . 10/7/2016
Great one shot I love the sweet and romantic moments ash and may had especially the first kiss ash and may shared together advance shipping is my main favorite shipping ash and may two of my favorite characters in the Pokemon anime advance shipping forever If u can can you make more advance shipping stories please
| Lover of Pokemon chapter 1 . 5/9/2015
| rugspuppy chapter 1 . 6/25/2013
Please don't tell me that may and ash are still 10...
| sid.praveen22 chapter 1 . 9/26/2012
| calvin360 chapter 1 . 4/15/2012
| StarNouveau chapter 1 . 7/21/2011
Gwaaah another great one-shot from youuu! ; u ;
You are so good. Pfffft, screw it. I'm adding you to my favorites!;D
And for a 'critique', I didn't see anything wrong to be honest. :3
The only part was that I thought the ending was a bit rushed was all.
I think next time you should write a lot more emotion and imagery into a last epic scene like that.
Like for example: As their lips parted. Ash's eyes glistened from the moon light. He gasped... blah blah
Yeah, sort of like adding in 'extra effect' if you will.;3
(Please don't kill me.; 0 ; I still L.O.V.E YOUR STORIESSSS! ; u ; )
Anyway, your my new favorite and I can't wait to see more more and moreeee! ~
| I am the weirdo chapter 1 . 9/26/2010
make them "fight" and then get them alone is my suguestion
| Fallout96 chapter 1 . 7/20/2010
Good Job! That was a cute story with a great ending! Keep it up