|Reviews for Star Trek Callisto|
| Tribute1 chapter 1 . 7/30/2010
Uhm, not sure where to start...This wasn't bad, but something was a little off with the story. I can't really put my finger on it.
The dialogue could use a little work, the commander saying "Your're kidding right?" seemed kinda wrong and out of place.
Your characters are a little flat as well. Spice them up a little bit. Maybe add some other alien species, even make one up if you have to. A trill and a half-betazoid we have seen before, give us something new and exciting.
And one other thing, I don't think a brother and sister could serve on the same ship. I would think there would be regulations against that.
Just my two cents, hope my constructive criticism helped. Keep at it! I look forward to reading more.