Reviews for When I Look At You
Guest chapter 2 . 11/21/2012
This is a very good story line and could be great with a beta to eliminate mistakes, I know the story is complete however I feel a little constructive criticism may help with other fics you write.
You really should slow down with your stories so they are not so confusing! for example Bella got up for her first day at school, having gone straight to her room after being hit by Charlie, so how on earth did she know he had brought her a car?
Then in this chapter Edward takes one look at Bella's bandaged arm and instantly knows whats going on when he's not spoke to her enough to know a single thing about her.
missysaaa.crystal chapter 10 . 1/5/2011
Short, but very good! :)
ammNIwriter chapter 1 . 10/28/2010
A very good plot and storyline however you have a lot of grammatical mistakes. Getting a Beta would help improve the quality of your work and make it even better.

A good beginning.


Godschildtweety chapter 10 . 10/1/2010
Great story
lilianyas chapter 10 . 9/18/2010
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lilianyas chapter 8 . 9/18/2010
! Stupid greg!
lilianyas chapter 6 . 9/18/2010
That was so hard for him to know! Rape is a very serious thing. Poor bella.
lilianyas chapter 5 . 9/18/2010
lilianyas chapter 4 . 9/18/2010
awwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwww! That was cute!
lilianyas chapter 3 . 9/18/2010
awwwwwwwwww! Poor bella!
lilianyas chapter 2 . 9/18/2010
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blake18 chapter 10 . 9/16/2010
I really like this story a lot. I love stories like this. You shouldn't let the number of reviews get you down. Can't wait until your next story.
Honziie chapter 10 . 9/12/2010
awww! such a nice ending to a great story :)
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