Reviews for Family Comes First
Slytherin Studios chapter 3 . 4/25/2014
I like it, please update soon.
Guest chapter 3 . 3/11/2013
Seventeen? I'm sorry but that is just TOO many kids. It's just a bit over the top and very hard to keep track of who is who and the similar sounding J names contribute to that problem. Five or six siblings would have done the trick and it would have been easier to follow.
Hippiechic81 chapter 3 . 9/12/2012
Hey! I was wondering when you are gonna update this story! I really like it!
roganjalex chapter 3 . 4/10/2012
amazing
LilyLover chapter 1 . 10/6/2011
1) Jada does not mean wise in Hebrew

2) American and African are not languages

3) It's spelled Colonel not kernel (that's corn, as in corn kernel)
madison blanche chapter 2 . 5/23/2011
There's a few errors I noticed...such as you misspelt "Colonel" and you put "0600 in the morning". Military time is set up so you don't have to say AM or PM. 0600 is obviously the morning.
Nugiha chapter 2 . 9/25/2010
Plz update
wandamarie chapter 2 . 7/22/2010
wow it is getting good thanks keep up the good work thanks
wandamarie chapter 1 . 7/22/2010
wow it sounds like a good story thanks