|Reviews for Breach of Contract: Twelve Signs|
| hushpuppy22 chapter 1 . 8/7/2010
That was an amazing chapter. Honestly, I usually hate when Harry is OOC, which I think he is a bit here because he doesn't mind murdering/killing. However, you're such a good writer that this reads like a suspense/mystery novel instead of fanfiction.
You're good enough to get published so why are you writing fanfiction instead of an original work?
| Rymrock chapter 2 . 8/6/2010
I'm really enjoying this. The first chapter caught my eye, and the second simply amazed me. You're writing style is very engaging and you definitely know how to tell a good story.
Looking forward to more. Keep it up!
| Wand Control chapter 1 . 8/2/2010
I don't usually read mystery fanfiction because not many authors can do it correctly. After reading the first chapter, I've got hope that this can actually turn into a decent suspense mystery fanfic, and that's saying a lot. Don't usually review, but 11 reviews for 2 chapters of this just isn't right. I'm sure you'll get more once the story spreads around a little more on other members favorites, community favorite, and etc. Hope you keep it up, don't really like Lupin's character in canon, so I like what you did with him here. Hope you explain a little more just why Harry felt it necessary to shift reality. I haven't read chapter 2 yet, so we'll see.
| psihary chapter 1 . 7/31/2010
Rituals, elements of mystery, Voldemort's name gets involved and Kingsley's murder... well the second chapter was everything I was hoping for and even a bit more... )
The scene with the broken man Kingsley was absolutely brilliant. Can't put it right into words but I liked it so much that I read it twice before finishing the chapter!
5/5 and honestly I can't wait to read the rest.
There are still a number of errors, missing words and such. Definitely less compared with the first chapter but they are still there.
| MisanthropicPrinciple chapter 2 . 7/31/2010
I really like this story a great deal, most especially for your exploration of what would really happen post-Voldemort. Casting Kingsley Shacklebolt as Robespierre using the Reign of Terror to soothe his conscience is quite inspired.
I'm also very fond of your Tonks, who is still as sassy as her canon counterpart but also has the seriousness of being an adult. It's refreshing.
Look forward to more.
| BlackGrim chapter 2 . 7/31/2010
I like this story. I like it a lot. Good plot and everything, can't wait till the next update.
| Steve chapter 2 . 7/30/2010
I'm enjoying this more and more as it goes along. Thanks for taking the time to write and post this. Looking forward to the next chapter.
| chrisguy9017 chapter 2 . 7/30/2010
Cool chapter. The story is very mysterious, more questions and vague foreshadowing. The triangle thing seems to be there in this chapter, Remus must have felt like crap, I hope for some insight into H/T relationship soon, I mean men and women can be best friends without a physical relationship but it is taxing if the girl can become hotter on command and the guy is a hero of sorts.
| chrisguy9017 chapter 1 . 7/30/2010
Really cool beginning, its a wonder you only have 5 reviews, but then again most people are only interested in Harem stories. I especially like how the drama around the relationship btw Harry and Tonks is shaping up, don't get me wrong I love a little bit of fluff but all the angst that might come of this is so cool to imagine especially since its a lop sided triangle. The whole blood pact thing is a mystery and I would like a better explanation sometime later.
| Miss Mercury101 chapter 1 . 7/28/2010
This is really interesting, and I shall await the next update. Still slightly confused as to what Harry and Loki have done; created a new reality based on canon?
| WhiteElfElder chapter 1 . 7/23/2010
What the he'll has Harry done? It seems he has done something even Voldemort wasn't crazed enough to attempt.
| Blah chapter 1 . 7/23/2010
| R2-Darth2 chapter 1 . 7/22/2010
Reading this I get the feeling that you're going for something quite dramatic such as having Tonks investigate Harry's doings and kick his ass for Dark-ass magic and such right after having his children or joining him for the kids' sake.
Hope I'm wrong and hoping to read more of this soon.
| PIWN chapter 1 . 7/22/2010
Interesting start I'll be looking forward to the next update.