Reviews for Darkness of the Heart
Azure Lightning Emerald Cloud chapter 8 . 12/9
i loved this chapter so much. i wanted to rain fire on the templars. the game lets you kill the mages but not their abusers? this was a catharis a long time in the making for me. thank you.
Paul Lenzen chapter 14 . 3/29
This was really good
Draco Oblivion chapter 11 . 12/27/2016
Wow :D
Draco Oblivion chapter 10 . 12/27/2016
Ah this is fun to read
Draco Oblivion chapter 9 . 12/27/2016
Wow, you really are willing to work outside the box the game gave you. Loving Revan in this just generally, Kallian surprised me though to be honest. Weird that she seemed so horrified by her power of suggestion but is okay about this...
Draco Oblivion chapter 8 . 12/27/2016
Damn that was satisfying. I mean she acted against Isolde but I feared Revan would only exist as a passiv observer, nice to see her make changes and especially when they lead to animosity with Wynne
darthtitan chapter 14 . 3/3/2016
I love this story!
I especially like the fact that Revan isn't a goody-goody like in so many other fanfics.
Truth be told, this Revan seems more realistic. After all, amnesiac or not, Revan was first and foremost a master strategist, which indicates that she is focused on achieving victory at ALL costs. Think Ender Wiggin from Ender's Game. So, if she comes off as evil and crass in interactions with individuals, it's because she's focused on the big picture as a general/commander. Not that I'm saying that this is right - it just seems more fitting for her backstory and character.
Nice work!
Wolfman217 chapter 14 . 2/13/2015
Really enjoyed reading this. It was very good :D
The Knowing chapter 2 . 12/16/2012
I don't know if you revealed Revan's gender before, but that was some serious sneaky-son-of-a-crap stuff you did right there.
Achaewa chapter 14 . 11/16/2012
Just read this story of yours and for a first fic it is superbly written and engaging. You have a way with words that leaves you engaged and the action scenes are well written.

I only have one complaint and that is the characters, while unikabe characters are well written as people you just love to hate, Revan is quite polarizing. On one side she helps Kallian and the group but on the other she is just so evil and unlikable that it is hard to root for her. The same could be said for Kallian, that while she is good and tries to help people, she is also so ruthless that in the end it leaves you, in this case me, having a hard time liking her.

That is not to say that you're a bad writer, you're quite a good one in fact, and this story is still quite enjoyable. Even if i'm more of a Leliana/any female shipper. Well i just wanted to say that you don't have to take my critiscism to heart, since it is your story, and that i still enjoyed it immensely.

So keep up the good work and keep on writing, cause you got talent. :-)
deathgeonous chapter 14 . 4/4/2012
This was an amazing story, and my calling it a story and not labeling it as a 'Fic' is a great complement in and of it's self. Personally, while I do sorta like the Star Wars setting somewhat, I really do HATE both the Jedi and the Sith, because they are both extremists, the Jedi lashing out in fear and the Sith in hate. Ah well, let's not to go into a psychological and philosophical debate about two fictional semi-sorta-religions. The only thing that saddens me about this great fic is the fact that since it's such a unique crossover, not many people have probably read it. Well, thanks for writing this, I'm off to the sequel, bye for now.
praeceps chapter 7 . 3/15/2012
ok you wanted to have a revan that stood apart from light and dark yet you have a revan who revels in the darkside so i think its safe to say you failed in that aspect
Taeniaea chapter 14 . 12/31/2011
cool story
IgnusDei chapter 14 . 9/8/2011
Nice concept, poor characterization. Revan has got too many shades of Stupid Evil for my tastes, and Kallian develops far too quickly into a sith lord for my tastes.
Ms. Doesn't-have-an-account chapter 14 . 9/8/2011
Obviously Kaimaler, a reviewer, knows nothing about Revan. Never even seemed to even TRY to research anything on Revan as she would have found out more of Revan and Malak's earlier years together. She would also have learned that Revan never had a singular master, he had several, and besides Kreia's questionable lessons, he never really had a Sith master or ever really "fell" to the darkside.

Why did you make him a woman? Every female author seems Hellbent on turning him into a chick. In canon, he's a human male, and has black hair. Seems I'm the only one that's bothered when that's changed. TT

Though I know it's necessary, to me, if Revan is/was Darkside I don't think he'd talk so much and have pointless conversations with people.

I liked your descriptions. The length of your chapters can be appreciated, though having every chapter have clumped-into-paragraph story telling can get a bit tiring to read. Maybe I'm just used to a more spaced out typing. Those seem to breathe better when theres more room.

I didn't like the way you handled Revan. Or that he's a girl. I'm a girl and I don't like femRevan, it's sad! D:

Am I the only one? .

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