|Reviews for Venom|
| Luna the Vampire chapter 1 . 7/25/2010
omg that was funny as HELL hahahha lolz poor naruto
great story btw hhahah :)
| NightWish4 chapter 1 . 7/25/2010
wow..it was good:)
| Carrots chapter 1 . 7/25/2010
Oh wow, I loved reading this so much!
Great job, I liked the awkwardness of Sakura having to ask Sasuke to sleep with her, and that they both have feelings for each other.
Loved how it ended with Naruto awake from all the noise too.
| Nonny chapter 1 . 7/25/2010
I agree with your other reviewers. This is one of, if not THE, best SasuSaku lemon(s) I've read. It has a great setting, wonderful language, and lovely character interaction. Your descriptions of both their bodies and the love making were mouth watering and very classy. I liked the insight into both of their points of view, not to mention poor Naruto's funny outside perspective.
I also really appreciated the fact that it was well written, such a relief when so much fanfiction falls short of the mark. It is always a pleasure to read authors who have obviously put effort into the presentation of their story. I would dearly love to read more of your work. I was so surprised to find this was the only one posted, and so newly posted too!
This may be a tough act to follow, but anything remotely near this quality would still be enjoyable. I hope that won't make you rest on your laurels too much though. _~
If I were going to give any advice for improvement I would only suggest more effort in the areas of canon settings and characters, though frankly any satisfying SasuSaku at this point has to be a bit OOC so that isn't a huge issue. Just a thought since you have obviously put so much effort into this, that readers of fanfiction tend to be cuing into what they recognize and identify with from the original story, so basically the more an author can connect to that the better a fanfiction will appeal to the readers.
Not that I'm implying this was particularly deficient in that regard, just that if anything at all has Some room for improvement that might be it. Frankly I thought you did an excellent job of working around some of those concerns in order to give us this great setting. Sasuke was so nice though! I liked that, but I'd also like to see something similar where he has a bit more of his "edge". However, that is just a preference. If you prefer to write this kind of interaction solely then I'm sure that no one, including myself, is going to object too much. More would be much appreciated!
| emeraldmoon14 chapter 1 . 7/25/2010
I really loved this one shot it has to be one of the best I have ever read and one of my favorites :).My favorite Naruto pairing is Sasuke&Sakura I like how you made them here they are really cute and I am glad that it wont just be a one night stand for ending part was funny I enjoyed Narutos reaction lol.I think there should maybe be a oneshot sequel to see what Naruto will do you did an amazing job
| xXNinXGalXx chapter 1 . 7/25/2010
haha sooooo funny!
| CrAzY-SiLLy-Me chapter 1 . 7/25/2010
Favorite part was the ending. Made me laugh. XD hahaha poor, poor Naruto. XDD
Those two had no idea how loud they were, tsktsk. Wonder what happened to Sai though? If Naruto was scarred, I bet Sai was worst off. XD
Pretty good lemon too. Loved how Sakura's role was just right, and how Sasuke appeared quite considerate despite his hidden desires. XD
| HollieB chapter 1 . 7/25/2010
Wow, that was good. I loved your use of language - and that sentence "He hardly seemed like a fantastic warrior at this time, only an exhausted lover." was really entrancing. Really well done. I look forward to reading more of your work.
| L chapter 1 . 7/25/2010
Unexpectedly good for your first Fanfic. I really liked naruto's part at the end. It made me laugh. Keep on writing!
| halfkyuubikat chapter 1 . 7/24/2010
This was an awesome story~! (And so greatly written, I was shocked when I realized that this was your first and only story!)
I really suggest you continue writing these SasuSaku smut fics, you definitely have a great amount of potential to be a well liked and fav'd writer for any fics.
Plus, this was written with correct spelling and grammar for the most part. That is something really hard to accomplish for people that have been writing fanfictions a long time.
I really hope to see more from you and for that I will add you to my Author Alert.
| shoshoryuu07 chapter 1 . 7/24/2010
I LOVE NARUTO'S REACTION. ))))
Love it! ;;)
| Crimson Tranquility chapter 1 . 7/24/2010
Haha this was pretty hilarious!
I loved Naruto's little rant at the end and Sakura's inner turmoil in the beginning!
| winkiestarr chapter 1 . 7/24/2010
Well done! Especially for a first fanfic! Love the background story and Naruto's reactions lol. Keep on writing! :)
| flour-chan xXx SSS chapter 1 . 7/24/2010
haha lol funny i don't read much sakusasu coz i like sasunaru more but this is funny at the end very hot. god i love sasuke.
| Emergency Squirtgun chapter 1 . 7/24/2010
Squee that was cute w some stories i read that are set up like this are just written like he secretly wanted her, she always wanted him, ohh a convienient moment of alone time, they do it, it's done, the end, but this had so many good things going on, and it wasn't rushed. -w- ahhh, good story.