Reviews for Venom
satoshii chapter 1 . 7/28/2010
If this is your first fanfic, then I am impressed. I can't wait for your future pieces.
Hana-Taisho chapter 1 . 7/28/2010
OMG, that last part with Naruto. I AM Sitll laughing my but off!

you did a wonderful job, and i like you explanion on why you spelled it come instead of Cum. and it still was a good smut story i love to read and enjoy.

thank you very much for the wonferful read.

good luck on your up comming challanges in life.
Aihsatan-Ellimac chapter 1 . 7/27/2010
oh my god!

what a way to start a wonderful story..

I'm hoping that you would do another Chapter for this..

I would want to know what they did in the shower in detail..

Anyway I truly enjoyed reading it..

Nice choice of words..

I can feel the passion in it..


Poor Naruto though I bet he just envy Sasuke

Keep it up..
Kachuyu13 chapter 1 . 7/27/2010
Lol incosiderate assholes. It be a funny thing if you made a chpater 2 with a threesome ;D this time naruto gets to join O lol jk! I loved this XD
Sasukeishot chapter 1 . 7/27/2010
Lol omg the ending was soo funny i fell of my chair lol ur amazing XD .. I Love this it was soo sweet .. i hope u write a storey like this but more chapters .. or continue this .. when they get back sasuke and sakura can move in together then get married and .. i am getting carried away lol sorry XD 3
Shadow of the Fire chapter 1 . 7/27/2010
That was epic, really good for a first-timer

I loved the part with Naruto in the end, so funny
xxxemiko.itooshixxx chapter 1 . 7/26/2010
This is awesome! You should do a sequel for this on the following day with Naruto humiliating Sasuke and Sakura! That would be funny!
Hlorke chapter 1 . 7/26/2010
Ahaha, poor Naruto XDD

I'm waiting for more fics from you! X3
SheWhoLeavesCrappyReviews chapter 1 . 7/26/2010
Inconsiderate assholes.. Loved that part XD
Cheyenne Uchiha chapter 1 . 7/26/2010
O my gosh I cant believe this is your first fanfic ever...I mean that lemon was better than most ive read...I'll bewaiting for more of your stories
Neko the kawatta cat chapter 1 . 7/26/2010
please make one more chaptor where they are in the shower OwO

- Love it by the way ;D
Luna the Vampire chapter 1 . 7/25/2010
omg that was funny as HELL hahahha lolz poor naruto

great story btw hhahah :)
NightWish4 chapter 1 . 7/25/2010 was good:)
Carrots chapter 1 . 7/25/2010
Oh wow, I loved reading this so much!

Great job, I liked the awkwardness of Sakura having to ask Sasuke to sleep with her, and that they both have feelings for each other.

Loved how it ended with Naruto awake from all the noise too.
Nonny chapter 1 . 7/25/2010
I agree with your other reviewers. This is one of, if not THE, best SasuSaku lemon(s) I've read. It has a great setting, wonderful language, and lovely character interaction. Your descriptions of both their bodies and the love making were mouth watering and very classy. I liked the insight into both of their points of view, not to mention poor Naruto's funny outside perspective.

I also really appreciated the fact that it was well written, such a relief when so much fanfiction falls short of the mark. It is always a pleasure to read authors who have obviously put effort into the presentation of their story. I would dearly love to read more of your work. I was so surprised to find this was the only one posted, and so newly posted too!

This may be a tough act to follow, but anything remotely near this quality would still be enjoyable. I hope that won't make you rest on your laurels too much though. _~

If I were going to give any advice for improvement I would only suggest more effort in the areas of canon settings and characters, though frankly any satisfying SasuSaku at this point has to be a bit OOC so that isn't a huge issue. Just a thought since you have obviously put so much effort into this, that readers of fanfiction tend to be cuing into what they recognize and identify with from the original story, so basically the more an author can connect to that the better a fanfiction will appeal to the readers.

Not that I'm implying this was particularly deficient in that regard, just that if anything at all has Some room for improvement that might be it. Frankly I thought you did an excellent job of working around some of those concerns in order to give us this great setting. Sasuke was so nice though! I liked that, but I'd also like to see something similar where he has a bit more of his "edge". However, that is just a preference. If you prefer to write this kind of interaction solely then I'm sure that no one, including myself, is going to object too much. More would be much appreciated!
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