|Reviews for Forgotten: Original|
| Xelako chapter 12 . 11/13/2013
It would be great if you could just continue this instead of rewriting it! I do really want to know what happened to her and MC! Normal people rewrite it when it's done
| Brother Sergeant Aeron chapter 2 . 8/5/2012
Is it possible for a spartan to go insane? Because after two years of seeing dead corpses, walking around on a barren planet, I'd be crazy.
| Ice Princezz chapter 12 . 12/29/2011
Awwww I think it was going fine as it was! But if u feel like rewriting then it's ur call. I'll make sure I follow along
| Recon 13 chapter 12 . 6/14/2011
This Whole story has been an excellent read so a rewrite with improvement's would leave me practically salivating good luck in the future.
I sent a friend invite to your gamertag accept if you want, i will be thinking bleh either way.
| Aurum-Animi chapter 12 . 6/13/2011
NO REWRITE PLEEEEASE!
| Silver06 chapter 12 . 6/13/2011
Okay, so I'm sorry that I'm not logged in right now, but here's my opinion. First don't delete this story, just set it as "discontinued" Second begin the new story. Ya could named the story Forgotten 2.0 ... I really have loved this story and I'm glad you're thinking of rewriting it. Also, with Hale 4 coming out next year I think you may get more reviews in the new one. *hugs*
| ScarletNova chapter 12 . 6/13/2011
I'm glad your still alive! I have been watching this story for quite a while now! I think its a good learning experience re-writing a story, no matter what you call it afterwards!
I am sure i will love the re-written on just as much as i loved Forgotten!
I hope you decide soon!
| Aurum-Animi chapter 11 . 6/3/2011
! CHILD WHERE IS THE REST OF YOUR WORK? IT IS NOTHING BUT A CRUEL HEART TO LEAVE A FASCINATED READER IN SUSPENSE FOR SO LONG. GET YOUR BUTT IN GEAR!
| douchiesnacks chapter 10 . 5/18/2011
| Andy chapter 11 . 4/12/2011
Love this story please continue it!
| Aurum-Animi chapter 11 . 4/7/2011
youuu should write another chapter. yes, that you should
| Silver-06 chapter 11 . 2/25/2011
Love your story. I hope you update soon! Do you think you could check out my Silver series and leave a review on what you think?
| The Nutty Squirrel chapter 11 . 12/26/2010
awsome,cant wait for next chapter
| segment thought chapter 11 . 11/28/2010
i love this. i also friggen love how jess annoys the sh*t outta john too XD
keep on writing! keep writing, because yur awesome! :D
| alonsis 2 chapter 7 . 11/26/2010
WALL OF TEXT!
Please fix it. Now. Post haste and all that. Also, This chapter was kinda of a let down after all the previous ones. It doesn't really reference the passage of time so it reads as though a day or so after getting back, Jesse is already causing havoc. With an infected wound.
After so long alone, and so many injuries, she really seems to move a lot. I'd have preferred to see it go slower, space out the funny stuff a little cause it tends to feel a little...crack like...when it's all lumped in at once.
She got hurt. Don't give her magic regen because she act's like a kid now.
What happened to the cool stuff when she was alone? Just because she is back with people, she turns little rebel kid on sugar?
I'm a bit negative, but I can't get past the wall of text, and you still seem to be feeling for a balance between humor and everything else, which is by no means a bad thing, but the tone at the moment is putting me off this story, which is a shame, because chapters 1-5 were utterly awesome.
Also, her armor was almost totaled. Make a issue of this fact, since spartan gear has to be made to fit.