|Reviews for Yoyo's lesson in love|
| Blues chapter 1 . 12/20/2011
Ha ha ha Funny and cool story. Too bad that old coot Sendak just wants to share yoyo with Sauzer. Badboys always win. Byuu the weak got his girl stolen by Palpaleos but anyways he would not have done anything with her. He is just a nice guy.
Sauzer on the other hand. Heck even that Sendak guy is less pathetic.
| Lord of Altair chapter 1 . 8/5/2010
It's good to see that I'm not the only Bahamut Lagoon fan here.
I like the concept of Yoyo being less obnoxious and accepting Byuu for who he is, but I need to give a word of advice to you:
When writting a story, it's good to stick to a language you know (English). Broken Japanese in an English story seems rather un-professional and a bit on the fanboyish side. If you want to be a professional fanfic writer, write in one language or the other, not both laguages at once.
Other than the fanboy Japanese, the story seems to have a rather good premise. Don't give up, all you can do is your best.