Reviews for Selfdestructing Hearts
mugglehugger chapter 1 . 5/23/2012
Liked the second person. I love the way you write LilySirius
AscendFlySoar chapter 1 . 2/2/2011
I did not even notice this was in second person; that's how captivating this is. Brilliant work.
sheriff stilinski chapter 1 . 10/10/2010
Awwww. I lovelovelovelovelove. :)

This is like the epitome of angst. I absolutely adore it.
MadameCissy chapter 1 . 8/24/2010
I liked this and it was definitly a good attempt to write in second person. Well done. The "forbidden" Sirius and Lily thing is growing on me more and more. I loved the last sentence, living a lie. It was beautiful and emotional. Thank you.
Princess Ducky chapter 1 . 8/13/2010
This is beautiful, and made me cry. I feel so sorry for Sirius.

-Princess Ducky
whispered touches chapter 1 . 8/12/2010
It was great second-person! It's very angsty and very something-that-could-have-happened, and it sounds like Sirius. It's so scandalous and secretive, so against the rules, and Sirius knew that, and I knew that he knew. So you got that across. Great job.

~whispered touches
SummerW chapter 1 . 8/12/2010
That was deff NOT a total failure. I've never read this pairing before, but you made me believe in it. You wrote really well and the title was picked perfectly. I was so wrapped up in it that i didn't even realise it was second person. When you mentioned it i was like "no way!" and i scrolled back up to read it again. :) You just made it flow and seem so natural. Great job! Thanks for sharing!
in sync chapter 1 . 8/9/2010
Oh gosh, this was excellent.

I love SiriusLily and Second person- and I think you did a marvelous job at it. It got the emotions out more, and made me feel very sad for Sirius.

Great job.

~Mystii
ouja chapter 1 . 8/8/2010
Whoa. I didn't even realize it was second person until you mentioned it. I guess that's a good thing. Because if you had done it in a way that was awkward and such I probably would have noticed.

Anyways I really liked it. All these good fic authors are pulling me over to the dark side that is Sirius/Lily! I know all the Harry/Draco people tend to call their ship the dark side, but I'm telling you Sirius/Lily is the true dark side. Such tension! And it's a completely doomed love affair. I love how you had it that neither of them could bring themselves to hurt James, but they still couldn't resist each other.
Ninja Potter chapter 1 . 8/7/2010
I also love Sirius/Lily. I think you did great writing in this 2nd person or whatever. Great, short, just what I was looking for.
saarraahhxxx chapter 1 . 8/7/2010
I hardly ever see 2nd person but this was amazing.

You did a great job!
SoUsay234 chapter 1 . 8/7/2010
I think you wrote second person beautifully. This is a very strong piece and I really liked it. Awesome job.
controlled climb chapter 1 . 8/7/2010
First of all, I love second person, and I think you did it extremely well!

I like the way the emotion really shown through in this fic, and I like how it was clear that Sirius knew that it was wrong, but even so, he still loved her.

Very sweet.. well, wrong word. 'twas more sad, really. But either way, really well done xD
Phips and Filly chapter 1 . 8/6/2010
Personally, i love the second person point of view, and people rarely ever use it. for a first try it was very well done. if you were to do it again, the only thing i'd recomend is adding a little more of the emotion for said 'you'. you want the reader to completely feel like the character this is about. and i didn't totally get that. (its hard to do. i'm certain i couldn't) but don't think i didn't love it! it's a very nice bittersweet lily/sirius, with a great hook and ending, and its beautifully writen :)
DramioneLurver chapter 1 . 8/6/2010
Oh my goodness, I LOVE your second person! The fact that it was written second person totally slipped my mind by the time I reached the end! It really worked, allowing me to completely slide into Sirius's character and see things from his POV. I'm usually not a Sirius/Lily fan, but I truly loved this piece. Very well written!
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