|Reviews for Smothering|
| MeAzrael chapter 1 . 10/11/2010
The third story I've read and the third one I liked :-)
Sam's visions were a great topic back then - and it was nice to have another look at them. I think it was wise of Kripke not to exaggerate that special ability, but it certainly is a thrilling and multilayered plot for our story. Because it is frightening on so many levels: Always catching small pieces of the puzzle, but never the whole picture - feeling the pain and the terror so intensely - and getting into real danger due to that "empathy... Not to mention the problem of seeing only the "special children".
"Peanuts are a symbol of purity" :-) Haha
Loved how Sam tries to finish the job with the ghost train when he gets the first vision - and Dean in his mother-hen mode.
' "Dean!" he called, and saw his brother's head shoot up, then Dean was making his way over. Sam read the stone a second time while he waited, wondering momentarily what the living Steve would have thought of the dead one's actions.' - that's SO Sam (the "old" Sam anyway)! Awesome.
And Sam ending up in this small room behind the wall - gave me the creeps. Thank God Dean was at the rescue in time!
Thanks for sharing
| Rosetta Brunestud chapter 1 . 8/17/2010
Wow! Cool story
Poor Sam, being trapped like that... I would go crazy, for sure ahaha
Good story ~
See ya around
| xXxShiniXKazexXx chapter 1 . 8/15/2010
Wow, this is a brilliant piece of work. )
| amyblair chapter 1 . 8/7/2010
Aw, I just loved this.
I totally LOVED that you put lyrics in this - and I'm a sucker for Dean singing. I really liked the choice of words you used. That was so funny. In such a scary circumstance.
I adored this future call to 'Swan Song' with Sam not letting Mandy die alone. That was just terrific.
I think my fave part, though, was Sam teasing Dean that peanuts were a symbol of purity. That was just classic and wonderful.
Thanks for the entertainment!
| Amberdreams chapter 1 . 8/4/2010
This would definitely have fit in as a genuine episode - the story-line and pacing work really well. It is always nice to get a view inside one of the boys' heads to get a feel for what is largely unpoken - all that love and concern for each other's welfare before it became too damaged and broken.
Just the right balance between the tension and suspense and light touch humour - another win!
| Heartless BytchhakaHelenBach1 chapter 1 . 8/3/2010
Loved your was sad but cute.I liked the twist about the girl's mom.
| Scullspeare chapter 1 . 8/1/2010
Great use of Sam's visions. I know Kripke & Co. had other stories to tell, but IMHO the visions had all kinds of potential that was seriously underused. At least with fanfic, we can explore some of that potential.
"I'm not a TV." *g*
Wonderful job with Sam's building claustrophobia when he's trapped inside the wall. I could feel the walls closing in.
Really enjoyed it. Thanks.
| Harrigan chapter 1 . 7/31/2010
I *do* miss the visions and the special kids. I didn't really expect you to go there (don't want to give anything away to folks who check reviews before deciding to read - though it's probably too late), but kudos on pulling off a different-than-usual outcome!
| JazzyIrish chapter 1 . 7/31/2010
Great story. Almost had forgotten how tough those visions were on Sam - both physically and emotionally if he didn't save the victims. I have to admit, that I was surprised to see old ghost Steve killing Mandy and trapping Sam behind the wall. We're conditioned to the boys saving everyone. ;)
Fabulous descriptions of Sam not being able to breathe during the visions and Dean coming to his rescue. Sometimes I think they are each other's "breath" of life.
Thanks for sharing this story with us. Until next time...
| ziggy.uk chapter 1 . 7/31/2010
Loved this. So much brotherliness as Sam suffers his visions and Dean does his best to help him ride them out and comfort him. And you showed exactly how they affect Sam, not only suffering like the victims but the desperation to save them, never knowing if they will be in time to prevent their deaths. Sad that Mandy died but at least she wasn't still trapped in the wall and Sam was there with her. Loved this part - He was okay, safe. With his brother, and sometimes Sam thought that was the only place he could really breathe - it said it all. And perfect ending, falling back into easy banter and teasing.
| irismay42 chapter 1 . 7/31/2010
Once again, I realise how uncomplicated season 1 suddenly seems!
As someone who's claustrophobic myself, I'm probably gonna have nightmares about getting trapped in a wall now! (Still struggle with those scenes in No Exit!)
I really liked how you built up Sam's growing sense of desperation and fear that his "gift" meant he could watch people die without being able to do anything about it. And that was a great twist at the end when Mandy turned out to be a "special kid"!
| calcium77 chapter 1 . 7/31/2010
I always have looked forward to Thursdays. This week it snuck up on me. But I was so happy when it came :-)
This was a really good story. Creepy ghost! Suffocating is one of my least desirable ways to die. You did a good job showing Sam's panic. I was a bit too :-)
| BranchSuper chapter 1 . 7/30/2010
Very interesting - how terrible it would be to feel what the subjects of Sam's visions feel when they happen. Then not to succeed in preventing the tragedy despite forewarning. At least Sam has Dean to help him through it. Very nicely written.
| Nerene chapter 1 . 7/30/2010
Oh my, another fantastic story! How do you do it? Like many of your other reviewers, I enjoy the brothers from Season 1. There was just something about the brotherly interaction that was so enjoyable to watch, even when they were at odds with one another. I was expecting Sam to reach Mandy just in the nick of time, but you totally went another direction in which Mandy's life was ended. It worked perfectly though allowing Sam's guilt to show his humanity. Even Dean shows his sensitivity when telling Sam that he did in fact save Mandy. Surprising too how she turned out to be one of the 'special children'. I'm looking forward to your story. I know it will be amazing as well. You are definitely a 'must read' author for me.
| KKBELVIS chapter 1 . 7/30/2010
"Of course." A leather fold was shoved into his hand, and Sam flipped it open with one hand before he rang the doorbell. It was an ID for Washington State Police Deputy Ulrich, complete with a photo of a much younger Sam. Sam shook his head minutely. He didn't even ask how Dean did it anymore.
It's the little details that make a story big fun! Pouring emotions into your charecters lie you did here::
YOu wrote: Sam hesitated, seeing the white-knuckled grip Buresch had on the screen door, and on his emotions. "I'm sorry," Sam said earnestly, then nodded and turned away.
This (As with all your stories) Was chock full of little details/emotions - that exploded into big fun!
My favorite line: 'evil wasn't always ugly'
Damn that is so true! And says so much in just a a little sentence.
I love how tight and complete your stories are. If that makes sense.
YOu wrote: With his brother, and sometimes Sam thought that was the only place he could really breathe.