|Reviews for Passing The Test|
| Dela Eden chapter 1 . 9/22/2010
It's good. Perhaps a little punctuation is missing but apart from that, well done! It brings back a lot of memories for me (I was in it a few months ago). Here's the punctuation notes:
"You want what?" Tevye said (queston mark)
"Please sir, I'm deeply in love with her." (comma and full stop)
"YOU'RE NOT EVEN JEWISH! OIL AND WATER CANNOT MIX!" (exclamation mark)
"I will convert."
"YOU CANNOT TURN WATER INTO OIL AND YOU CANNOT TURN OIL INTO WATER," Tevye yelled, "EITHER YOU ARE COMPLETELY OUT OF YOUR MIND OR YOU ARE CRAZY." (full stop)
"I am probably both," The Russian said. (full stop)
Tevye calmed down a little.
"Do you know what it means to convert? Do you realize you would need to get circumcised son?"
"I know and I don't care. A little hurt is worth it." (full stop)
"Alright," Tevye said, "You have my blessing." (full stop)
Apart from that, well done!