Reviews for Harry Potter and the Spirit Within
bubblegumb1 chapter 7 . 11/24/2004
hey i've only just recently started reading your story. i love it. i've read some of your authors notes and agree with you on mentioning other authors and stuff. if they don't like your work, don't read it! simple as that! i like how you manage to keep real a way. how life is like chaos, like you said...or something like that.

i only have one request. while i was reading this chapter(i can't remember if it was in other chapters) but sometimes when you did a scene just sorta...happened. no litte


or a little ~ between paragraphs. because of this(i'm not blamming you or anything) it sorta became a little confusing. Like when Albus is talking to Fudge, then Snapes there and i was like 'hold up! Snape's saying that in front of Fudge?' it took me awhile to realize that fudge wasn't there anymore. and again when you flashed to harry and co. kinda shocker, one second your with snape and albus then BAM! your in the library.

well, just some thoughts. i don't know about other people, but i know it would help me immensly if you just had a little


between scenes. like mentioned above. i'm a little slow sometimes so it can take me awhile to realise that people have moved.



p.s. i apologise if my spelling and grammar is bad. i'm not the greatest at those kinda things.
barbarataku chapter 6 . 11/24/2004
Itis lunch time then. I like to review after a couple of chapters so I have a feel for what I want to say,BUT in your case I just wanted to find out what was happening next. What lovely long chapters. Yes, Sirius is not dead! Ron has something important about himself and has discovered his family thinks he's a HERO. Your plot is belevable and very exciting. I adore Drusilla Dax and intend to check out At The End from Sugar Quill. The Fred and George creation was brilliant. Who could ask for more. Thanks for sharing.
Lilas chapter 7 . 11/24/2004
Oh WOW! YOU UPDATED! SCORE! Admitedly, I had to go back and read the previous chapter to remember the story and what had happened, but I remembered well enough. WOW! I loved how you pulled out the 'last Gryffindor' thing! *ponders* JKR said that something that seemed insignificant in the second book happened and was going to be really important, and your fic has me thinking now... Hm... You had some mispellings here and there (the most frequent one being Minister for Magic while Fudge was speaking) but other than that, I LOVE this fic! The plot is just AMAZING! Keep up the good work and I DO hope you'll take less time to update this time around _
Ciaran chapter 2 . 11/24/2004

Your story is going wonderfully and I hope it continues. I was wondering, though, who translated your copy of the Tao Te Ching. I pulled out my copy as I started reading the chapters-that style is fairly distinctive-and they were quite different. I'd be much obliged if you'd reply with the translator and publisher of your copy. Thank you,

Ciaran Scott
js chapter 7 . 11/24/2004
I'm glad you haven't given up on this story. Keep up the good storytelling.
May chapter 6 . 11/24/2004
Von chapter 7 . 11/24/2004
YAHOO! A NEW CHAPTER! Awesome! I lurve it! THANK YOU! If you'll excuse me, I must dash off and revel in the stream of happiness that new chapters leave me in... Ah...
Jamie chapter 7 . 11/23/2004
I just don't know what to say, i have been waiting patiently for many of months for this update, and all I can think of saying is wonderful, excellent, fantisic chapter; and thank you very much for updating. This truely is one the best post-gof stories out in the world of fanfiction and I really hope you finished this story! anyway please continued(can't wait for that little chat between harry and sirius about the dursely's) and please, please update soon, don't leave hanging for an whole other year. Once again thank you
Weirdcraz24 chapter 6 . 11/16/2004
ur story is great so far! please continue! u can't leave it just like that! thanxs!
Potions and Snitches New Fics chapter 1 . 11/13/2004
Hello wonderful author! :)

This is just to let you know that your story is listed in my website "Potions and Snitches", a fanfiction site dedicated to the mentor relationships between Harry Potter and Severus Snape. Please let me know if you want me to take it down, update your info, talk about chocolate frogs, or have any questions. A link to the website is in my profile.

Thank you for your story! :)

F.Kelley chapter 3 . 10/31/2004
CPR is 15 chest compressions to to breaths.

Your story is progressing very well. It hooked my interest from the first. It is giving just enough info to keep me interested but not enough to give away the plot. Great!
Western Master 3 chapter 6 . 10/16/2004
Prankers Anonymous. The P.A. If the twins started a club, that would be it. I should be laughing evilly about now, but people give me strange looks when I do.
enb2004 chapter 6 . 9/29/2004
How could you just leave us there? Please don't give up on this story! UPDATE!
Aki no Yume1 chapter 6 . 9/19/2004
Love your story, hope you will continue and update soon!
NephyRiddle chapter 6 . 8/29/2004
Good story, please update soon. Um...I gotta go, so there isn't very much more to say, but I do think this is a great story, write more soon?
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