Reviews for Once Upon Lunchtime
fourthsecret chapter 1 . 6/21/2013
hahaha.. i love this story!
and the potato chips.. haha.. i love it! good work and keep it up!
charm13insomnia chapter 1 . 4/5/2013
ha ha hahaahahhah so funny
littlemsstrawberry chapter 1 . 3/5/2013
Lol love it!
Hana Izuru chapter 1 . 7/13/2012
wow,3 cm times 3 cm times 3 is amazing lol
Reverberating Winds chapter 1 . 4/5/2012
Oh, wow, that was great. It's a memorable, humorous, well-written story. You captured their personalities perfectly. Nice work!
The Blocked Writer chapter 1 . 10/7/2011
saphren chapter 1 . 6/22/2011
i would prefer steak to potato wedges, but chips are still awesome. if Setsuna takes precision to a whole new level i wonder about Tieria who is all 'everything must be perfect'. this is cute, funny and cheery
Satiah chapter 1 . 6/15/2011
I greatly enjoyed reading this story. It was lighthearted and playful, yet remained realistic. It's hard to think someone so friendly as Neil wouldn't try something like this; attempting to figure out who the people around him really are underneath their code name facades. I loved your interpretation of both characters, and could hear each distinct voice clearly through the use of your words. Wonderful story, excellent writing, and I was pleased to find myself laughing by the end. :)
Mneo chapter 1 . 1/2/2011
D'aww. That was really cute. I really enjoyed reading that. I liked how Setsuna would eat his chips before because after all he is still just a kid.
Chang-Tong chapter 1 . 12/28/2010
Now I'm craving for steaks doused in gravy after reading this... XDD And lol, did I read him wrong, or was Setsuna agitated at the end there? XDDD Oh, Neil, Neil, Neil... look at what you did. Lmao! XDDD

I captured both of Setsuna and Neil's personalities down perfectly, I believe, and I'm happy with the description in this story overall. It's a simple story layout, but the descriptions made it all the more worthwhile, especially with you you explained Setsuna's outward, subtle action and Neil's jovial personality. :DDD

Love this!
iDevalu chapter 1 . 10/24/2010
Aw. Setsuna is a kid after all. Why else would he have eaten his chips before the main dish? xD

&& Lockon. How is he still amazing even after a fail like that?

Ah, the questions of the universe.

Very well written, I must say. Loved it :)
dark.retreat chapter 1 . 9/21/2010
haha, I really enjoyed reading this! Simple, but with enough material to go around to keep it from being dry. Personally, I prefer reading shorter snippets like this to longer fics because the writing and ideas are generally more cohesive. So don't hide unfinished things like this in your database (because I want to read them)...!
Incoming-Duck-Fiend chapter 1 . 9/9/2010
I love chips too!

I'm kind of like setsuna-at lunch i always dissect my pizza into tiny cubes before eating, which is a pretty messy task considering all of the sauce the lunch ladies put onto it!

Awesome story, it made me laugh!

While reading these types of stories , i've realized that the characters never seem to be IN character, but your story captures the characters personalities so perfectly its like this was part of the anime!

Just amazing! Keep writing!
Kizee chapter 1 . 9/7/2010
Awesome! I just love Setsuna!
Raux chapter 1 . 8/17/2010
This was great! XD And amusing.

Setsuna, despite being a bit bland, is a character that intrigues me. But finding good fanfiction on him (of any kind) is difficult.

Although short and sweet, I enjoyed this oneshot. Thanks for this!

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