If I copied and pasted every word I loved of this story the entire thing word be sitting here in this little box. It was so melodic it was like a poem. "The rest are for the cathedrals and the skyscrapers, the ones that will crumble with her heart into dust and sepia tinted memories without ever seeing the light of day." I love how you incorporated the line about the train into the storyline as well and the ending was one of the most beautiful things I've ever read. You're a very talented writer.

Gahh, you're so good I'm beginning to resent you! I love your style of writing, it's so... Exquisite (I know there's a better word than that, but I'm too lazy to grab a thesaurus). You just have such a unique way of describing things, you don't rely on cliches that normally cheapen a good story. And everyone's so in character! I want to hate you but I love your writing so much I just can't do it.

Wonderfully written, and full of emotion - nicely done :)

I'm glad that you showed how Arthur and Ariadne are different from Mal and Cobb and that they won't meet the same fate. The last scene summed it all up perfectly. I can't believe the beginning was all a dream though, you really had me enthralled and then you ripped it away. I can see why Ariadne was so upset, but at least she gave in to Arthur in the end!

My goodness-you have an absolutely iron-control over plot and diction! Your words are used marvelously to drive your tone all the way through the piece, until it breaks at the climax-when Ariadne took out her totem, I swear I forgot to breathe for the short duration of the end of the section.

Riveting piece, and though it's so short, your many descriptions add to the piece, never detracting from the flow. Beautifully powerful-wonderful job!

I love what you do with the stream of consciousness here. I had forgotten in the beginning that Ariadne was even dreaming until you woke her up.

Also, you write Arthur and Ariadne beautifully. I enjoy all your stories about them :)

I'm sick right now and can't come up with more thoughtful words of praise, but know that I thoroughly enjoy your work.

Vehe

Aaaaaw

Fluffy cotton balls!

That was amazing. Simply amazing. You are such an unbelievable writer, and I love your stories. This was perfect. I hope you keep writing Arthur/Ariadne stories. You totally get the characters. It's just... wow.

Woow! I loved it! That was amazing! Nice work :)

This is really cute. I think you've kept them both in character really well (something not to take for granted) and you're a really good writer! Good luck with whatever you're doing next - Ashabagawa

Absolutely loved it

Excellent and so beautifully-written. I enjoyed reading this story so much (even though I had to check some words in dictionary, which is rather rare last times). This story is so poetic! There is no action, few dialogues and all that made it unique and, as I wrote, really beautiful. It was a great pleasure to read it.

You made Arthur’s and Ariadne’s love a hard one- they are made of contradiction, so their relationship just can’t be easy one. I have to say that I totally agree with you in this point- characters like Arthur and Ariadne belongs to each other, but, in the same time, their love can make them really suffer (I’m really curious if Christopher Nolan knows what he made, I mean all this stories about Arthur and Ariadne… It’s amazing that so many people are able to see them as a couple and willing to write about it.)

In your story there is something that I think is rather unique. I’m talking about the difference you see between Cobb&Mal and Arthur&Ariadne. Most of the people create A/A relation similar to this one that shared Cobb and Mol. They treat them as the two halves of the whole. And I have to admit I quite enjoyed most of this stories. But your point of view is just more interesting and gives your story some special taste.

So, as you can see I really like your story. That’s way I’m going to read Matryoshka now.

Bravo, this was wonderfully written. They were both in-character and your use of language was absorbing and absolutely beautiful. I usually try to read with a more critical eye but I can't think of anything to criticise here because everything feels just right. A delight to read; definitely adding this to my favourites. :)

~The Silver Phoenix

I love it. Another well-written story. Thank you.

Very nice