|Reviews for River Pond|
| hi chapter 1 . 7/31/2013
River song is amy and rorys daughter
| Agreed chapter 3 . 5/16/2011
A story doesn't have to be perfect, I am perfectly aware of that and of how difficult writing can be, I am a writer myself.
However, when writing about something that doesn't belong to you, you should always try to remain faithful to the universe. I'm not saying that this detail is extremely important but there are many things in your story that don't really respect the universe and the characters. I'd say, mostly River Song's personality, the Doctor seems relatively fine.
As for your writing ? It's concise but not bad, there are some qualities in your style and vocabulary and it seems relatively coherent.
I've definitely seen worse than your story, mostly, I could be a bit mean and say that your character is a bit of a Mary Sue (in a universe that is quite full of them) but I happen to believe that most writers actually create Mary Sue's even when they are well written and not seen as such, plus it's a fanfiction and most fanfictions are made to be entertaining but I guess the plot could be a bit more interesting if you put a bit of suspense and questioning in your writing.
You were the one who said that it was "Pond" when I first told you that it wasn't, which is why I answered back to remind you that it was a joke in the series.
Remember that when you publish your writing, you expose yourself to criticism.
| Anonymous - Go Away chapter 1 . 5/14/2011
(this is the author)
It is a story! It doesn't have to perfect, quit going on about how she is meant to be Williams, not Pond.
| still not right chapter 2 . 5/13/2011
It's a joke, he calls them Pond but there's no way Amy could have given her name to her husband, it doesn't work like that. It's just a way to emphasize the fact that she is his companion and that they are her boys.
Plus, they can keep the "water" theme that way.
| When We Collide chapter 1 . 5/10/2011
By the way, it IS Pond. In the last episode of series 5, the Doctor calls Rory Mr Pond, and eventually Rory agrees.
| Notpond chapter 1 . 5/9/2011
It's Williams not Pond !
| Mrs. 11th chapter 8 . 4/8/2011
If you still need ideas, maybe you could do something with Julia Child? Like, River P wants cooking lessons and the Doctor lites the kitchen on fire. That would be funny
| PrettyPinkOrchard chapter 6 . 12/15/2010
awhh this was really sad. please update really soon! I love this story, missed it so much when you didn't update
| PrettyPinkOrchard chapter 5 . 9/1/2010
Can't wait for more :)
| PrettyPinkOrchard chapter 4 . 8/6/2010
Awhh poor river pond. I like how you had River song comfort her as though she understands the pain that she was in. I lurveee this story :) xxx update soon :D
| katya.holmes4417 chapter 1 . 8/6/2010
Hey this is a great first chapter I love it has a realy good idea
| eyepatchesandpipes chapter 3 . 8/5/2010
Really liked it :) I love how you have song being so protective of pond but it coming out aggresivley, I think you have song and the doctor down perfectly
| PrettyPinkOrchard chapter 3 . 8/5/2010
Awesome as usual :) you can do anything with this story now because you can take them on loads of adventures. Maybe you could make River pond just like Amy. Or something could happen between the Doctor and River Song or they can just go to different planets and time zones. But I love this story loads please keep writing xxx
| eyepatchesandpipes chapter 2 . 8/4/2010
Loved it xD clever doctor! Here's my idea! They could bump into an older version of river, doesn't batter if it's song or pond but song would make more sense. Especially if she jumped out of a space ship.
| PrettyPinkOrchard chapter 2 . 8/4/2010
Amazing :) you need to keep writing because I only gave you like a small outline and you turned it in to this awesome story :) if you ever need any more ideas or anything just ask :) xxx