|Reviews for Pokemon Jake Dragon's Adventures|
| pokefan-93 chapter 10 . 8/8/2013
its confusing to know who is speaking sometimes because you put who speaks in a new sentence and in that sae sentence put someone else speaking for example:
Lilian asked, " I'm entering!"
said Crystal with excitement to Lilian, " And were do you go if your not entering?..."
I added, " Your welcome to stay and watch, but you'll need to be in the audience, you see I can't let you in the back with the other coordinators unless you enter."
Lilian replied, " Ok the, good luck out there Crystal, I'll be in the front row."
I said, " Thanks Jake, I'll do my best!"
It would be better like this:
" I'm entering!"said Crystal with excitement to Lilian
" And were do you go if your not entering?..."I added
" Your welcome to stay and watch, but you'll need to be in the audience, you see I can't let you in the back with the other coordinators unless you enter," Lilian replied
" Ok the, good luck out there Crystal, I'll be in the front row," I said
" Thanks Jake, I'll do my best!" Crystal winked.
but apart from this is a decent story so far
| ELMO-fAN cLUB MeMbER chapter 54 . 8/7/2013
Really enjoying this story, hope you update soon
| Asdsf chapter 54 . 7/14/2013
Plz plz plz update I love love love this story
| Gabyy3 chapter 24 . 5/7/2013
do you still need OC's?
Betwen nice chappies , i am enjoying this story quite a lot :D
| jaketherabbi chapter 1 . 2/27/2013
that was sh*t
| JellyDonut2 chapter 54 . 2/20/2013
why does it end at chapter 54, and are you going to do all the other reigons with jake in it traveling and beating the gyms, because if you do he should go with piplup for the sinnoh
| creaperkiller105 chapter 54 . 1/30/2013
update plz plz plz
| IggyCopperfield chapter 53 . 11/29/2012
good story read mine Pokemon:kanto journey
| CoolCat135 chapter 53 . 10/4/2012
Pretty goddamn awesome, dude!
| MonfernoFreak chapter 53 . 10/1/2012
Thank god you're back! I missed your story, and a great comeback chapter. Nice :]
| MonfernoFreak chapter 52 . 9/1/2012
BTW we know nothing about you so how would we know that's you? Lol, anyway, I think you should've explained why Moltres was acting that way but apart from that it was really good :D And PLEASEEEEE update with the league!
| MonfernoFreak chapter 51 . 9/1/2012
Such drama in this chapter. But if you wanted him to say Mew TWO then don't put too. Anyway, still really good but just watch out for how you spell Pokemon's names :D
| MonfernoFreak chapter 50 . 9/1/2012
Good chapter, but there was just no excitment at all. I thought that this would happen on the episdoe of the gym battle. Anyway, you still described flying well :D
| MonfernoFreak chapter 49 . 8/31/2012
Very cool chapter, but was that Dawn;s mum? If it was, her naem is Johanna Berlitz. I'll read the last three chapters another day, but please start writing in the time I don't read!
| MonfernoFreak chapter 48 . 8/31/2012
There actually should be 5 rounds btw. Because you said Crystal was number 23, which ment the GF alowwed 32 coordinators through. So Round 1: Top 32. Round 2: Top 16. Round 3: Top 8. I think you get my point but just look out for little details like those. I loved how Courtney said girl cause that's waht a guy would say, so it she calling herself a trans? LOLOL anyway very good :D