|Reviews for This Girl|
| MuggleCreator chapter 1 . 11/15/2014
Little confused as to who the man and girl are...
Great characterisation of the Black God though...
| HermioneGirl96 chapter 1 . 3/9/2014
I love your writing voice. Like a lot.
| Rk chapter 1 . 8/28/2013
Wow. Wouldn't he remember Alanna's trip to death as well
| Guest chapter 1 . 7/9/2013
I keep coming back to read this story because it is fantastic! My sister and I both love Tamora Pierce, and I think she would be proud of how you portrayed her characters. We never would have thought of the connection but now it feels like, how could we be so blind!
| Batty Buttercups chapter 1 . 3/30/2013
I have no idea why, but this story speaks to me a lot. A beautiful, well-written fic. Thanks for the read. :)
| Guest chapter 1 . 1/22/2013
lovely! the black god is awesome. and i loved how he was so colourful to beka. not black at all. again...as always...nice writing. :)
| yay chapter 1 . 10/23/2012
I think this is pretty good. The only constructive criticism I have is that this sentence " There were some services rendered that could not be forgotten, not even as centuries had passed and bloodlines were diluted." is a little long. Maybe you could cut out either the "centuries" or the "bloodline" part.
| Daine chapter 1 . 9/6/2011
That was really nice, I was confused for a minute before I remembered aly was related to beka through her father
| blackspiritfire chapter 1 . 9/5/2011
that was really good you did a good job connecting Beca and Aly. it was a good read
| Rhys chapter 1 . 8/5/2011
Ooh, I liked it! Especially for a quick job! I love things that flesh out little moments, and this one did it perfectly. Excellent tone, too; just enough detail without getting bogged down. My compliments!
| xXthenextbookwormXx chapter 1 . 7/11/2011
Who is she? I know he was talking of Becca when he mentioned the one with the baton, but who's the other one? A random descendant? Somebody else we know of? I'm confused. It's a good fic, though, regardless.
| meranirosabara chapter 1 . 6/3/2011
I thought that this story was really good. It was an amazing idea to write about and you should definitely write more chapters to it.
| Analie Janes chapter 1 . 3/13/2011
That was a really cool story idea...and you wrote it really well! I like how you made the connection to Beka...they do have the same bloodline. It was very interesting to read :)
| PurpleReader29 chapter 1 . 2/18/2011
I like it. Interesting perspective. Nice nodd to Kel.
| mayalewis16 chapter 1 . 1/30/2011
Its PERFECT! Good job!