Reviews for The Fire Omens
Evon1222 chapter 1 . 3/29/2012
Really good work. I can't believe this only has 9 reviews. It grab my attention right off and I couldn't stop reading until I finished, which is a feat in and of itself. I often times become bored and disinterested with one-shots, but that did happen with your piece at any point. Keep up the excellent writing.
mercuryandglass chapter 1 . 3/28/2012
Quite interesting. I'm slightly confused, but then again, I'm aoften told that I am easily so.

Great fic!

xXxMartelxXx chapter 1 . 3/28/2012
That was pretty cool. Your writing is good enough that, in some parts, I felt that you were reaching a level far beyond my understanding, despite understanding every word and sentence I read.

My only true nitpick is that the spell is "Incendio", not "Icendio". The only other real "flaw", if it could even be called that, is that the pacing is a little weird; in some parts it flows very well, in other it somehow goes into a tangent and stagnates before returning to the main, uh, pace. I don't know how to describe it, but, anyway! My complaint there is that it makes the story a little hard to follow in some parts, but on the other hand, it was probably intentional in your part, because it reflects the disjointed madness that is bouncing around Voldemort's head after messing with his soul -and consequently, with his mind-, despite his best efforts to maintain order and intelligence.
Bill The Door chapter 1 . 3/28/2012
This has got to be one of the best oneshots I've read. You're writing is absolutely fantastic, you manage to convey the meaning and emotion behind you're words so much better than almost any other writers of fanfiction.
SakuraCa chapter 1 . 3/28/2012
Great story, I love your writing style.
en extase chapter 1 . 7/10/2011
Nicely done. You do the intentional don't-capitalize-the-title-to-be-sophisticated thing but that's forgivable when the writing stands up on its own. Very poetic.
Insomniac Owl chapter 1 . 5/31/2011
This is absolutely haunting. And I love, love, love the writing. My favorite scene is the one where Tom is standing on the cliffs, where Salazar once came; you get this feeling of history but also that it means absolutely nothing to Tom, who creates his own.
SlashMyDreams chapter 1 . 9/25/2010
your tinsel tinkerbell chapter 1 . 8/11/2010
I cannot tell you how excited I was to see that you'd posted something new. Tom is my favorite character, and no one writes him quite like you do. (Plus, it's gen. There is precious little gen in this fandom.) This is...I take the first part (Tom returning from the Forest in pieces) as a reference to "The Essence and the Descent". I love the whole bit with Slytherin and "all incantations were prayers" and oh, the poison. I didn't quite understand it, but I think maybe it was Basilisk poison? In any case, I prefer it when things are ambiguous. I just...and not to mention the prose! It's lyrical, almost.

I adore everything about this piece, and I do hope you'll write more. :)
Fairylein chapter 1 . 8/4/2010
Interesting and well written story. I like the idea of it split into seven parts (nice analogy to the number of horcruxes).

Some corrections to your German:

Warum kommen Sie hier? Ich habe das Leben vergessen – write instead: Warum sind Sie hergekommen? Ich habe dieses Leben vergessen.

* Ich möchte, dass Sie es noch einmal erinnern – better: Ich möchte, dass Sie sich wieder daran erinnern.

* Ich kann nicht helfen, aber ich weiß, wer kann - Ich kann Ihnen nicht helfen, aber ich kenne jemanden, der es kann (though I think this is bit of an awkward sentence because of the repetition of "kann". I would rather say "(..) jemanden, der es könnte".)
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