|Reviews for DragonAge: The Halla Reborn|
| Alpenwolf chapter 51 . 7/3
Serena as queen, i would love to see it, but i cant see assembly accepting it so easily.
| Alpenwolf chapter 41 . 6/30
Alistair not giving in to Eamon? Alistair glaring at him, telling him that he won't be able to change his decision and Isolde being nicer ... yeah, I can totally live with that.
| Alpenwolf chapter 39 . 6/30
Elissa and Howe a pair? You really leave me wondering what else you might be doing in this story o.O
| Alpenwolf chapter 36 . 6/30
Did Arawn just sacrifice Shianni? Grr, can't someone already kill him and free Thedas of him?
| Alpenwolf chapter 19 . 6/29
Okay, a bloodmage controlled Loghain, probably even making sure that Cailan died at Ostagar ... though what are Howe and Cauthrien are thinking they will get for playing along? Helping the blood mage? Howe wants the throne, which probably be making him Arawn's pawn ... and what about Cauthrien? Is she in love with howe? or what? I'm confused and I'm sure that there are many puzzle parts I haven't seen yet.
| Alpenwolf chapter 15 . 6/27
Whats with adela and the males surrounding her? Everyone seems to fall in love with her ... and i propably will become concerned if eamon also starts to fall in love with her or something.
| Alpenwolf chapter 12 . 6/25
Loghain ... who is controlling you? Flemeth would be a possibility, but too easy ... uldred? Cauthrien? Rendon? Or someone else entirely? Something is definitely not right.
| Alpenwolf chapter 9 . 6/24
Where you could watch over her? And then the day you are away, occupied with something else she gets into legal trouble by killing humans to rescue herself and her friends from vaughan and his lackeys ... I'm not sure if one can call that 'watching over her' ...
| Furionknight chapter 81 . 4/1
I look forward to more :)
| Shakespira chapter 81 . 1/28
From the opening: "Acidic rain and brimstone rained down upon the battlefield, now littered with the bodies of blackened darkspawn and soldiers - human, elven and dwarven – alike, splattering ground made muddy with water and blood upon the corpses. "
To the closing: "Disbelief filled his heart and displayed itself fully upon his face as Roland stared down at the broken form of Riordan. The senior Warden had fallen from the back of the Archdemon, and crashed to the ground below...Disbelief turned to outright anger at the man's foolish attempt to bring down the fallen god on his own.
"Just couldn't share the victory, could you?" the young man asked the corpse, frowning down at the waste of effort and life. Sighing, he finished, "We really could have used your help at the fort.""
This was a tour-de-force of the Siege of Denerim and I was caught up in the tension and emotion of the scenes. Other than some odd spelling errors, the chapter was riveting and intense and descriptive without being overdrawn. There was just the right 'feel' of a large-scale battle. The pacing was perfect.
I especially appreciated Roland's comments to a dead Riordan. I love Riordan in game up until that point when he absolutely doesn't use an ounce of common sense in trying to get the archdemon grounded.
What an enthralling chapter!
| Wyl chapter 81 . 1/26
This chapter was wonderfully detailed, and I could feel the tension throughout. I thought you did a great job of balancing the narrative of what's mostly a grindfest in-game. By that I mean you picked your spots to include combat description well, so it never felt like too much or too little. I vaguely remember struggling with that when writing this part in my DA:O story.
I also liked how you included the little "pauses" for strategy discussions, character internal thoughts, and so on. The reasoning behind splitting up the groups and who went where was very sound, and the debates, arguments, and individual concerns amidst the overall goal felt very real. Really, the blend of "big picture" and "little picture" elements was just perfect, and made for a very compelling read.
To beat this dead horse one last time, I'll say I find the lack of attention to detail on proper names to be distracting. It should be "Oghren," not "Ogren." "Ferelden," not "Fereldan" for the same of the country ('Fereldan' with an 'an' is a person from the country of Ferelden). "Redcliffe," not "Redcliff."
Lastly, I liked Roland's reaction to Riordan's death. That bitterness bordering on resentment always felt natural to me, even though most DA:O stories I've ready tend to go for a sad/mourning emotional response. I just think it's a shortsighted, selfish action on Riordan's part that contradicts what he preaches all along and compromises their efforts even further. Oh well...
Anyway, great chapter!
| Gizmo60 chapter 81 . 1/21
Riveting. Thank you for this chapter so soon after the last. I look forward to the next instalment with baited breath. I have to re-iterate I am loving this story soooo much. Thank you, you have a wonderful talent.
| olivegbg chapter 81 . 1/20
Great description of the siege of Denerhim.
| Shakespira chapter 80 . 1/19
The cadence of this chapter was wonderful ... the events in the city combined with the refrain of the "The Grey Wardens were there" and the underground march of the darkspawn created a very high level of tension throughout the chapter.
Which ended in a cliffhanger...but I'm guessing you knew that.
| gizmo60 chapter 80 . 1/13
Thank you for your efforts. The tension draws ever tighter. Exciting. I await the next instalment with baited breath.