|Reviews for Unexpected|
| Child of Music and Dreams chapter 1 . 1/27
Edward, you bastard...
| XxLivingInMyOwnWorldxX chapter 1 . 8/9/2010
Omg, can you please,please,please, extend this story into more than just a oneshot? PLEASE
| Ivy O'Hara chapter 1 . 8/6/2010
Welcome to the site! )
This was a good start, but it can always be improved. There were couple of grammar stuff you can fix, but it's pretty simple to do that in the future.
The story part was good, but there needs to be more explanation. Like how long was Bella pregnant? If she were pregnant for a month, that would determined the reaction she would have but if it were a week, I don't think she would have wanted to kill herself. I hope I'm making it understandable.
Also, if Bella was just waking up, she probably wouldn't be able to talk right so you can sort of play with that :)
Just suggestions and hopefully this review was beneficial to you :)
I'll admit that you're better than some on the site, that's for sure. Don't doubt yourself by saying that you're a bad writer. It takes patience and practice.