Reviews for A Fresh Start
CharitinaX chapter 4 . 12/18/2014
Wow.
I would just like to point out that Neal is obsessed and in love with this random person, who is barely introduced to the audience, by the third chapter and pursuing a relationship with her by the fourth.
Not that that's not allowed or anything... I mean I'm sure Mary Sue land has different laws from the ones on Earth.
Anon Y. Mous chapter 2 . 5/27/2014
This story could easily be improved by adding more than dialogue. You, as the author, may know all about the setting, what the characters are thinking, and any and all other details. But when the majority of the writing is in dialogue the reader doesn't really have a lot to work with. Even plays which are comprised mostly of dialogue contain stage directions. I haven't continued reading to see if you've corrected this and I won't.
This is just a friendly suggestion. Let us know what they're doing, feeling, thinking (to a certain extent).
Guest chapter 22 . 7/10/2012
wow this is amazing i cant believe it ended !
mfmxxx chapter 1 . 7/6/2011
My gripe with it? He told her about Kate within a minute... no one does that.
Lauri3n chapter 22 . 1/8/2011
This is excellent!
Tinker178 chapter 22 . 1/8/2011
ahhh this is a sweet story! keep writing!
KahlanDanvers1988 chapter 22 . 12/7/2010
Soooo awesome :}
Lammstrellicon chapter 22 . 11/30/2010
Fluff! I love fluf-

Ivan: *glares*

. . . . damn that creepy bastard. um well nice chapter I like it! *nods*
amroberts17 chapter 22 . 11/29/2010
Great chapter! I'm happy Neal and Jamie are back together. Please update soon!
Angels-heart1 chapter 22 . 11/25/2010
Aww! Glad they are back together! Great chapters! Can't wait to read more!
Sapphire12985 chapter 22 . 11/25/2010
oh, that was so sweet :')
BurnedSpy chapter 22 . 11/25/2010
aw great chapter can't wait for next one please update soon better yet do it ASAP
Sapphire12985 chapter 21 . 11/8/2010
awww what a sweet old woman XD
amroberts17 chapter 21 . 11/8/2010
Great chapter. Can't wait for more. Please post soon!

xoxo Ash
stargatesg1973 chapter 21 . 11/8/2010
Awww, but Neal would've made such a good Daddy. Too bad. Hope to see more.

Michelle
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